Rate this poem it is for a project about MENTAL HEALTH i am 13 and i just thought about doing my project as a poem.Rate it out of 5 and why?
Mental Health
Mental health refers to the human’s individual Mind
It is an Emotional feeling deep inside
A state of emotions
A psychological well-being potion
That goes through your own mind
To his or her cognitive and emotional capabilities
That can show some of there real personalities
It is a function in society
That could be a whole anxiety
A psychological condition
That can be cured in any position
2006-08-10 23:19:17 · 5 answers · asked by Anonymous in Education & Reference ➔ Other - Education
Hey I like this poem....
I think that it sure deserves a 4 out of 5 and you sould be very proud of your poetic ability...
2006-08-11 15:33:03 · answer #1 · answered by wollemi_pine_writer 6 · 2⤊ 1⤋
A very good poem and a very good description of mental health problems. I would rate it as about a 3.8 out of 5, the only 'niggle' I have, is about lines 5 and 6. In 5 you say "your own mind" making it singular and even personal, which is acceptable. Then in 6, you say "his or her", this is relating to one individual still, but you have removed the personal aspect, I think it jars a little.
Maybe it would be smoother with "through a mind" or "To those cognitive..." because in the first suggestion, it would be impersonal and then it would fit with the impersonal 'his or hers'; the second suggestion puts the emphasis on the capabilities rather than the physical reality of the mind. These are just suggestions, it's your poem to write as you want. I hope you are not offended by my criticism.
2006-08-11 00:59:02 · answer #2 · answered by swanlen 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
you recognize what i actually like it honest i actually do.noticeably the section "human beings write approximately inner maximum craze perplexed Sentiments that are in basic terms an element yet they omit to be sure in the process the haze there's a lot different interior the international to unwrap Love is over rated yet right here i'm ? Writing approximately it, i'm considered one of those sham i assume I flunked the examination regardless of if it is going to instruct; love is a seize"
2016-10-01 22:42:05 · answer #3 · answered by ? 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I give this poem a 4. I like the way your worked in
psychological words. Just correct the word 'there'.
You meant the word 'their' instead. Good luck with your project. Hope you get a good grade.
2006-08-11 03:09:51 · answer #4 · answered by Precious Gem 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
yeah that's a good poem, i think u should focus cos i believe u gat the talent
2006-08-10 23:37:25 · answer #5 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋