She, my sanctuary
There when I’m gloomy
There when I am blissful
She soothes my worries away
And just for a minute I am sane once again
She is what I breathe for
She is what I live for
She comes into my ears
Deep inside my heart
Her words wrap around my soul
Warps me into the unknown
Her temple is so gentle
Magical in its abyss
Precious in its charm
Passionate as can be
Daunting yet passive
Calm however, fierce
Romantic and enchanting
Her language is a voyage
Embarking me into the sea
Melody, its waves
So tender in its unique beauty
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The poem is not about a woman. It's about my love, my passion for music.
Please no one copy.
What do you guys think?
2006-08-09 19:37:30 · 12 answers · asked by Athena 4 in Family & Relationships ➔ Singles & Dating
The poem is good. I love music as well. I'm actually a music major at USF in Florida.
Music is therapeutic...it can tame a tiger and soothe a burning soul!
2006-08-09 20:19:37 · answer #1 · answered by NuTTeR 2 · 1⤊ 0⤋
I love music. Modern music, like rap or fake rock (ex: Eminem/Greenday) is just a garble of sounds. But real music, like Mozart or Pink Floyd, is just the way you described it. I think it's lovely.
2006-08-10 02:44:25 · answer #2 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
Sorry I have to be nice to you, writing is the baring of your soul. And yes it may have flaws and that's what makes it so nice. I do like your poem and your attitude - but i will not pick flaws. Enjoy the process of writing, critics are always around.
2006-08-10 02:44:18 · answer #3 · answered by 40andgoing 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I really like this poem. Expect..where you rhymed temple with gentle in the 12th line. The rhyming doesn't fit. But its really good!!
Kudos to you!!
2006-08-10 02:43:10 · answer #4 · answered by mlove1307 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Your phrasing is kind of awkward, e.g. "Embarking me into the sea" and your use of commas is a mystery.
2006-08-10 02:45:13 · answer #5 · answered by lee m 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I think it's a really beautiful poem............that's what I feel for my grl M A R YJANE : )
2006-08-10 02:46:01 · answer #6 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
thats a really great poem.u express ur self and ur feelings.u should keep writing its really good.
2006-08-10 02:52:01 · answer #7 · answered by Yo_shorty 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I think it is wonderful. You have a lot of talent, keep it up!
2006-08-10 02:44:01 · answer #8 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
Beauuuuuuuuuuuuuutifullllll !!!!!!
Sorry, I can't help being nice.
Just love it.
2006-08-10 02:46:11 · answer #9 · answered by Kanda 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
i like it
i don't know poetry , but i know what i like
2006-08-10 02:45:45 · answer #10 · answered by bob 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋