what do u think of this poem i just wrote i am 17 plz be honest plz tell me if it sucks or not???

Question

Here I Am


Here I am.
Once again.
Pen in hand.
Finding myself broken.
Everything’s…broken.
Once again.
Here I write.
The words which I cannot speak.
Reflecting on the pain in my heart.
Which leaves me weak.
Once again.
Here I cry.
Tears like rain.
Slip from my eyes.
Every drop, releasing pain.
Once again.
Here I wait.
An empty life.
In this empty place.
Just another lonely person searching for a familiar face.
Once again.
Here I live.
Day by day.
Waiting for hope to find me.
And take me away.
Once again.
Here I stay.
Looking for something.
Anything, to believe in.
That will get me through yet another day.
Once again….
Here I Am.
Here I Write.
Here I Cry.
Here I Wait.
Here I Live.
Here I Stay.

Here I Am….

Answer 1

ok its good..but dont make it so emo-ish

Answer 2

Even though it is sad, it is a way for you as a person to put into words how you are feeling. A very good way to get past the pain of whatever it is that is on your mind or even how happy we are, in turn I believe that you as a poet have a talent keep all you write and someday something may come of it.

Now that's something to believe in, to get you through another day ......

Keep up the good work

Answer 3

I write poetry. It is a great way to relieve pain, stress, anything. Though I am no brilliant writer, I am very good. I'm very critical. So here is your diagnosis:

It's beautiful. It wraps it's wings around and drains you of anything else. I can here your voice. It reads it to me and tells me what is happening. You have talent. You have an idea of who you are in the sense in poetry. You can go far. Keep writing. The more you write, the more your voice becomes your own!

Answer 4

It needs more flow. It drags a bit after itself. It lacks a sort of climax and doesn't give much of an impression other than the one it opened with. It's static and simply doesn't work like that.

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Answer 5

Its a really, but the one thing I hate about poetry is how rare it is to find a good poem about something happy. And then when you do find a happy poem a lot of them suck. You`ve got some talent, so I hope you write a few happy poems too.

Answer 6

I like it. It also gives you a creative outlet for your feelings. Keep up the good work.. but maybe the next one could be a bit more up beat. It is a little depressing.

Just glad you allowed yourself to let it out.

Keep at it. This is good. Kinda reminds me of a song.

Alex

Answer 7

It's very good writing, but I sincerely hope it's not a reflection of your feelings. It would be bad for an older person to feel that bad, but you are surely too young to feel that bad. But the poem is really great! Keep writing!!

Answer 8

Yours is my first answer for today, my back is hurting, and I'm not in a good mood, my Caps Lock is always staying on , and I'm pissed , I can't type and it's really hot here in Phoenix; But I like your writing very much, you show alot of potential, good job! Don't worry happiness will find you!

Answer 9

in all honesty im not even going to read this entire poem because poetry is an expression of things that mey not be appropriate to say out loud so jus keep venting and dont worry about whether its good or not thas not what poetry is about

Answer 10

i think of which you're down (unhappy or disenchanted even dissapointed). however the poem is written nicely.daily persons are demise wheather we word or no longer yet on a similar time as we are a life attempt to assist one yet another and make complete use of our life with the aid of doing sturdy issues and pray to god.

Answer 11

I think it's good; you're very good at conveying deep emotion, and that's not an easy thing to do. Don't let these teenage years make you hopeless, though; it does get better. I think it's great that you're using poetry to express yourself. It really helps. Been there.