What do you think of these 2 songs I wrote?(be honest)?

Question

1)Death on the Street is all what we need!
They kill innocent lives,
And maybe our ownselves,
So run like Hell and get outa town!

2)Am i mad?
Or am i sad?
This is not good,
for my mood.
My own true love,
You never did know me!
I am not the one you think I am,
This is my dark side...which I am!

I won't bow,
to that God,
Who made my life so odd!
My life is an Image,
An imagination,not True!
All I say now,
Which I know,
Is:That I am dead!

Answer 1

The first reminds me of something that System of a Down might sing- you should work a bit more on it- it has good potential. The second song, i'm not really liking. Like the only words I like in it are "My life is an image, an imagination, not true!" But just keep on writing and you will come up with even better stuff. So good luck!!!

Answer 2

You Can Never Be Honest Till You Hear the Song! But I Liked The Lyrics! Just Lacks Music!

Answer 3

I like them each however i consider the primary one must be a lil' bit quicker and that i consider the moment one could sound well if it used to be to the identical song of 7 matters by means of miley cyrus, however in case you desired it to be like a truly tune than you could must get her permission. So perhaps its only a well thought to have the song that you just at first got here up with.

Answer 4

I don't like it at all. But that shouldn't stop you from writing. Keep it up cause it's a nice hobby.

Answer 5

Ummmm....uh...wonderful?

Answer 6

I saw a dog, sit on a log, and fight with a hog. You get my point.

Answer 7

they are ok, but not my kind of music. Keep it up though, I sure other people might like it.

Answer 8

Needs more RHYME

Answer 9

I like it.

Answer 10

2nd one is pretty good. 1st one is too short.