what do you think of this peom?

Question

one day i woke up
knowing that the day would go on

i realized that life is sad
so i went back to sleep

Answer 1

depressing and to the point but look at the ants they and us are the same

Answer 2

I like the first two lines of the poem. And I like the second two lines of the poem. I just don't feel that it is complete. You start as if you are emerging from some type of hardship in your world, then you finish as if you landed right back into it. So the poem serves its purpose. The cause of the conflict in the poem has not been resolved, so the poem offers no solution. Whatever prompted this is what needs to be fixed...not the poem itself.

Answer 3

To be brutally honest, I think it's sort of dmub.

Get the heck out of bed and get busy. If you just get moving and do something you don't have time to be sad.

If you don't know what to do, call a local church or social agency and volunteer your services.

If that doesn't work, try a serotonin reuptake inhibitor.

Answer 4

how about

one morning i woke up,
and the bed felt so warm.

i realized that's sad,
to let her,
be left alone
so going to sleep was,
my only thought.

knowing that ,
the
clock couldn't be stop.

your poem has a nice idea in it
but you should let it " float" and your lines don't seem to be
connected.
but a very good try Carry on.

read this it will give you nice perspective

Answer 5

I think you would be brilliant,but learn to spell and people will take you seriously.

Answer 6

short and wonderful,,please continue in writing

Saheb
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Answer 7

It sucks

Answer 8

is good, short and sweet

my fav i ever wrote was.....

i am sad
i lost something i never had.