what do you think of this.
open heated, as open as the sky,
crystal blue eyes that make you want to cry,
curls that look the best together, this guy i could dream of forever.
my love for him will go on together,
untill i know we have lost eachother.
2006-08-02 04:56:04 · 9 answers · asked by poetryslame200 2 in Family & Relationships ➔ Singles & Dating
You seem to like this guy alot
Not just because he looks so hot
You feel the love that's deep inside
As endless as the flowing tide.
I hope he feels the same for you
And let's his love come shining through
May happiness fill all your days
And bring you joy in countless ways!
2006-08-02 05:07:25 · answer #1 · answered by nudie chick 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Love is deep but can sink even deeper when passion flows like blood red wine. Hearts beating, beating louder than ever, let you know that love is divine. Two become one in a matter of seconds, those seconds pass as fast as light. The time spent together is remembered and cherished and that love shall be shared for life.
2006-08-02 12:10:34 · answer #2 · answered by mystico6 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I write poems acutually I'm saving them to make a book in the future but that poem you wrote is good do you write alot or just started writing poems?
2006-08-02 12:02:03 · answer #3 · answered by Juan 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
WOW! i like that! i'm a sucker for the sappy stuff...i've written a few poems before, but they're mostly love poems...and i wrote one for my best friend before she moved 1500 miles away...
2006-08-02 12:02:04 · answer #4 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
Well Poetryslame, this is pretty good but it needs some work. You are really into the rhyming thing huh?
2006-08-02 12:01:03 · answer #5 · answered by mlove1307 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
It's a failed poem. It's cliched, the rhymes are forced, and it has no particular meaning other than teen angst.
2006-08-02 12:00:56 · answer #6 · answered by teh_sexi_hotttie 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
It's good - it's an expression of you and that is beautiful. You just keep writing.
2006-08-02 12:22:00 · answer #7 · answered by love earth 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
its ok but come on go to a web site and get on frome their!!!
2006-08-02 12:04:08 · answer #8 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
it's ok
2006-08-02 12:00:51 · answer #9 · answered by chrisbrownsyounglove1614 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋