*Winter Comes and Goes*
Despair comes like a plague
Depression is on it's way
Mist and snow, it's very vague
To see what lies for that day
Trip and stumble through the fears
What lies ahead is yet to be seen
Fright and terror comes out in tears
It's a horrible, dreadful scene
Blizards and strong winds
Darkness and frosty cold
Reminds us about our sins
Let go of it and take hold
A shaft of light pierces through
A shining star appears in northern lights
I staggered over, because it drew
It drew me through these bitter nights
Light came through and grass grew
Spring appeared with joy and victory
The skies turned crystal clear blue
I never thought this could be
I had not done it all alone
There was hope and strength given
Did not have to sigh or grown
For God had me forgiven
I stood with the strength He gave
I was through this bitter winter
Because Jesus rose up from the grave
Now hope has come and will enter
2006-08-01 22:07:42 · 24 answers · asked by OnFireForJesus! 3 in Society & Culture ➔ Religion & Spirituality
Wow...congratulations I love it, if there was a rating betwen 1 and 10 I would give you 9.9...your poem is very nice and cute!
I also like to analyze poetry that's what we do in our school courses.
Nice faith you got there too :)
2006-08-01 22:13:02 · answer #1 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 2⤋
Pretty good. It has a strong cadance and easy to read. I wasn't sure where it was going at first (could be because I am getting sleepy) but it wraps up quite well. Be wary though of using too many homonyms as they can be seen as a cop out for putting 100% in a poem (you didn't overly use them at all though I only mention it because I see it so often that its a trap best to avoid and warn other writes about).
2006-08-01 22:18:01 · answer #2 · answered by Lasher702 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I majored in lit in college. i could say for this poem, you want some historic past on the poet. It starts off out kinda unhappy, with the view. 'Futures i have divorced' maximum like refers to abandoned hopes and aims. The 'do not look decrease back' and knife reference is probably about getting over painful thoughts. That it now no longer cuts implies desire. Or probably numbness. The stuff on complacency probably ability he feels he enable someone down by ability of no longer doing something he must have carried out. hence the accusatory voices. The very last paragraph is slightly better complicated. My sense is that the narrator discovered his existence classes and acted for this reason, hence the great advantages. This guy appears like a soldier to me. one which believes that no longer taking action at some needed second brought about others harm. Now he's grew to develop into that attitude round, and placed some peace. He gave up previous and futile tries and took a diverse lifestyle, and he's beginning to locate his existence better helpful. i do not commonly like poems, yet my moms and dads spents thousands that they did no longer have so i could study a thanks to interpret then. i'm better about novels, despite the indisputable fact that. again, you'll probably take advantage of understanding something of this author's existence. This one is incredibly personal, previous the final sense of the ask your self and cruelty of the international I regularly see in lesser poems.
2016-11-27 20:22:09 · answer #3 · answered by minissale 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
it's TERRIFIC . you go girl :D
but one suggestion...if you read your poem out loud it sounds a bit weird. try to change the metric to the same in all stanzas.
for example
Trip and stumble through the fears
What lies ahead is yet to be seen
Fright and terror comes out in tears
It's a horrible, dreadful scene
Blizards and strong winds
Darkness and frosty cold
Reminds us about our sins
Let go of it and take hold
the stanza trip and stumble through the fears is like 7 beats, but the following stanza is much shorter.
but other than that it's really great, good job :)
2006-08-01 22:13:35 · answer #4 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
To what james j said that is not true, some poems need to be long to express what someone has to say, like in this one it is full filling and heartwarming, and I like how you had the transition from snow and ice and how scary it is to how Jesus helps you
P.S.
love it.
2006-08-01 22:16:30 · answer #5 · answered by Everone says I am Emo, am I? 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
It's very beautiful and I like the way you put things together. I like the word combination and I think that you really have a talant!
2006-08-01 22:12:47 · answer #6 · answered by Sweet Dream 2 · 1⤊ 0⤋
You nailed it...He never said it would be easy..He just said to trust that He would see us through it. You conveyed that nicely and in such an awesome way! YOU SO TOTALLY ROCK! You have a gift, its for certain. Love in Christ, ~J~ <><
2006-08-01 22:34:40 · answer #7 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
when I started reading, I thought it was a bit emo...
...when I got halfway through, it started to pick up...
...by the end, it was all a bit too godsquad...
...I think it would do nicely if I'd just lost a close relative...
...unfortunately, I'm actually quite happy, so it didn't do a whole heap for me.
2006-08-01 22:14:59 · answer #8 · answered by jedi_reverend_daade_selei 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I love poetry especially when written from the heart. You are good at it. Good luck if you plan on continuing.....
2006-08-01 22:12:59 · answer #9 · answered by ? 5 · 1⤊ 0⤋
very touching and heartfelt..two of the most vital elements that make up a great poem.
way to go :)
2006-08-01 22:21:27 · answer #10 · answered by Wildfire7 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋