What do you think of my poem?

Question

This poem is on the love of God and on the verse in
Ephesians 3:18-19

You do not know how deep love goes
A love which covers many woes
From the smallest to the greatest
No other love could be the finest

You do not know how high love reaches
To the throne of many graces
Where the mercy seat awaits
With cleansing blood and, open gates

You do not know how wide love stretches
Passion that no other matches
A mystery? YES, it's true. And yet this love, it lives in you.

Answer 1

lacks adjectives of color and a few adverbs to emphasize action.

Answer 2

I really like it how you made a poem out of a verse from the Bible. That's very neat to do. I loved the way you glorified God in this poem. Your poem had meaning unlike a lot of other poems that are rude or just about nothing at all. I write some poems too, but I don't think I am that great. But you sure are good. Keep it up and you will improve. oh, how old are you?

Just a few things if you want advice to make it better. The word "greatest" doesn't really well rhyme with "finest." Maybe you could find another word, but still capture the same feeling. Although if you can't that's find and just leave it the way it is. Then there was "reaches" and "graces", well yes they rhyme at the end, but I think you need a better word to rhyme with it to make it more flow.

I really liked it don't get me wrong!!! God bless you for using your talents for him. He loves it when people do that who truly mean it!
Keep it up and one day you will be so great at writing poems. And use it to glorify the one you love, God!

Answer 3

Your poem is very beautiful and deep, and thanks for sharing it with us. It makes us think about the love of God which goes beyond any knowledge (1). That's why God's love is misterious but --at the same time-- infinite, pure, and true. All love found on the earth is like a drop of water compared to the ocean of His love.

Beautiful poem. You were given a talent, and am glad you're using it to praise the Lord. May God keep blessing you.and inspire you to do more poems!

Answer 4

Leave out the cleansing blood sister. There is enough blood shed in the world today in the name of cleansing and it is not of God. Have mercy for those that die everyday due to stupidity. There is but one God and he is jealous. He sent many profits here to teach us how to behave. There is only one God, the most high with armys of Angels to aid him in helping humanity. All in all, Gods love does not seem to live in everyone... That's what I think of your poem.

Answer 5

rating it is like a five i mean its not that good but it has imagination and u most likely put some time in it red skies ripping tears and venus pluto and mars has me wondering where do the lost go dark blades of time eclipse the sun wit ta moon and heavenly grace the world has but lost one moment and then another as time slips us bye and we still ask why we dance the pain away from love where soft gentle tears become grave stones of grieve and the memory of loved ones carry on in our minds til we to whisper our last breath ; any ways i do poetry an that took five secoond to write so keep working on yours

Answer 6

A perfect description of the mercy and love given to us by GOD

Answer 7

Beautiful Sentiment...

Answer 8

I like it! I like that it glorifies God and all he is but at the same time is like "*knock knock* Don't you realize all this is going on while you are blind?" to the reader.

From an English Major, I give it two thumbs up.

Answer 9

your poem was pretty ,
if you love spritual poetry i suggest you try reading rumi`s poems
(if you already havent). he is a great spritual poet
the original language is persian but the english translations are so beautiful too
link:
http://www.khamush.com/
http://www.khamush.com/poetry/

Answer 10

sweet message... a bit sing-songy... love the fact that you like rhymed verse, though... keep writing!