she walks into the room i gaze at her beaty, my heart stops beating my eyes fill with love and desire.she smiles at me . my haet goes at full spead like a stampede. she walks,ow so graceful and lite, closer and closer, heart beating faster and faster, she stpos. the earth grows still. she sits next to me. and i fate.....
to be cuntinued....................
true love at fist site part 2
i wake up in the nurse ofice. "hay it seems you woke." she said. "wheres the nurse" i asked. "she left" she answerd. "who are you" i asked. 'the names ammy. whats yours"? she asked. "my name is suruma" i replied. "well, suruma,im now the girl who sits next to you.and apariently your escort to the nurses" she said. we giggled. "well i think ill go back to class' i said. "sorry school over in 10 minites. ill walk you home. i m your new neibor". so lightning dose strike twice............
to be countinued....................
true love at first site 3
we were walking home i didnt say much she mostly talked about how she got here. i staired at her gorguse wavy hair her lushiose lips.oooooohhhhhhhh!!!!!!!!!so beutyful! she showed me her house and we talked a little then i went home i. babys dont sleep this good. the next day my mom woke me up and said " hoeney some girls waiten for you" .
to be countioed......................
true love at first site 4
i wen't down stairs. ammy was stannding on the porch looking at the sky. for awhile i stood their and wached her, then i said "hay, nice weather, isnt it"."ya but that not all thats nice" she said. i blushed, i usaly dont. we walked to school. we didnt talk much, just walked. "so do you have any friends" she asked. "not realy, i had two friends but i moved and lost touch" i answered. "well ill be your friend.....or more" she said. this women gets write to the point i thought.
to be continued.......................
2006-07-27 09:58:54 · 21 answers · asked by Anonymous in Family & Relationships ➔ Singles & Dating
Its beautiful!! Marry me boy!
2006-07-27 10:02:07 · answer #1 · answered by PG 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Try Spell check for a change.
2006-07-27 10:01:16 · answer #2 · answered by Alex007 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
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2016-10-08 09:42:47 · answer #3 · answered by ? 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Cheesey, Too touchy feeley, not a fan of romance, its I not i, Lots of words all in a row
2006-07-27 10:03:59 · answer #4 · answered by Buzzy360comeCme 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
the answer to the question is 42!, with that said lets get back to the soap opera. ....Has she addressed me in her sultry voice i fixated on her smile, thought to myself i see my sunshine, for her words were made of silk, soft and flowing. .......okay you all get the picture, no i am no relationship to the auther, but your work has merit, but you have the wrong forum for it.
2006-07-27 10:07:37 · answer #5 · answered by close_my_eyes2002 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
your at a good start....just check your spelling and rewrite the story in novel form, not poetry form, becuase it does not ride like a poem.
good luck!
2006-07-27 10:03:30 · answer #6 · answered by Malory 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
copyright 1957
2006-07-27 10:00:45 · answer #7 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
I would recommend that you work on your spelling first and then your poetry. Maybe you should have someone proofread your work first.
2006-07-27 10:02:03 · answer #8 · answered by Lidia T 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
THIS WAS SO BORING IT SEEMED TO GO ON FOREVR AT THE END IT DDNT RLLY MAKE SENSE AND LEARN TO SPELL
2006-07-27 10:12:02 · answer #9 · answered by black_gurl 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
nice, but you really need help with your spelling. plz go back to 1st grade.
2006-07-27 10:03:33 · answer #10 · answered by momo 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋