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2006-07-26 14:13:41 · 9 answers · asked by Anonymous in Family & Relationships ➔ Singles & Dating
I can't read poems that have rhymes at the end of each line.
2006-07-26 14:15:49 · answer #1 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
Oh NO NO NO!!!!!! You're trying too hard. The poem is good, a lot better than I would have been able to write, but here's the thing: You can't coax a girl into liking you by writing poems and letters. If anything, you will make her lose respect for you. She isn't worth all that trouble anyway! If they reject you once, there's no hope of any good relationship forming between the two of you. There are very few successful reconciliations in real life, even though it happens all the time in movies. For some reason, she didn't like you enough to stick with you. You needn't psychoanalyze the chick, just forget about her and say "Next!" I know it might be hard for you to accept, but this is coming from years of experience and careful study of the female psyche. Good luck with the next one!
2006-07-26 14:23:02 · answer #2 · answered by anonymous 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I liked the poem ( not so much because of the meter which was a little ragged in spots, but because in spite of those flaws the raw emotion came pouring out of it in such a way that the reader can genuinely feel your pain), and I think you should keep it and whittle it into a form that will surpass the boundaries of the crisis from which it sprang.
All you asked of us was our opinion of the poem, so I've limited my comments to your request. Did you prefer instead for readers to comment on what you're going through as well?
I look forward with much interest to anything else you have to say on this matter. I wish you well in all your future endeavors, and I urge you to remember this: no matter how this situation turns out, you've done something admirable with the pain associated with this experience.
2006-07-26 14:28:48 · answer #3 · answered by Captain S 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
This is a poem, that rant you typed on the other page? You have to shape it up, cut some words out, make sure of your choice of words.
What do you know of poetry?
Take a creative writing course.
2006-07-26 14:18:10 · answer #4 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
MAKE IT FLOWW!!
"I felt betrayed and alone
I really needed to talk to her but I couldn’t even get her on the phone"
it should be something like this:
i felt so betrayed i felt so alone
i needed to talk but she wont pick up the phone
2006-07-26 14:22:01 · answer #5 · answered by somethingcorporate<3 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
i can feel your sincerity.. coz nobody can write poems like that if you are not inspired to. it shows that you really love her so much anyways,do anything to prove your love to her...but be sure to set your limitatons though
2006-07-26 14:21:34 · answer #6 · answered by moonstruckmissy 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
i didnt read it but you seem nice just a little needy which is cool i mean to each his own
2006-07-26 14:18:27 · answer #7 · answered by tom b 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
well please show us the poems thanx it would really help and what kind of poem is it???
2006-07-26 14:18:52 · answer #8 · answered by helendear 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Don't beg!
2006-07-26 14:19:16 · answer #9 · answered by Jen 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋