For those who prefer poems that rhyme instead of free verse How about this poem?

Question

God give me simple moments as these

That reach my soul and give it ease.

A smile, a touch, a friendly cheer

These lift me up from sheer despair

I find your love in the oddest ways

Darkest nights the difficult days.

Life comes as simple daily things

The flower that blooms the birds that sings.

May I never close my eyes

Let me not think myself too wise.

Thank you God for simple joys

Like the love I have for my boys

Answer 1

Better then the other poem.......Thanks.

Answer 2

What simple moments do you refer?
That most likely are which you prefer.
A smile that gleams across a room,
Does not necesarily mean a groom!
If touched, you say, by someone near,
Do they always see your cheer?
To lift you from despair that's sheer,
Wouldn't you need to lose your fear?
And finding love denotes some searching,
When everyone knows it's not lurching!
Love is there for all to experience,
And to build resilience,
As what goes up must come down,
Except your age, I have found!
But getting back to your quaint poem,
I've got a Kuckabarra near my home,
Have you ever heard it's terrible song?
It laughs and laughs for oh so long,
(I wish I wasn't replying in rhyme,
I'd be done in half the time!)
So, anyway, back to your eye,
without closing them, they'd dry.
And never think you're wiser than most,
They'll probably tie you to a post!
I'm glad you're thankful for your life,
But do you think of others' strife?

So at the end, before I hit send,
Let me say, for no extra pay,
I loved your words (except the birds),
Your rhyme is great, (I'm not fake!).
But let's look over the fence, without getting tense,
And see that the world has no I, like teamwork lacks.

Ok, so the last line didn't have an internal rhyme but a point was being made. Thank-you.

Answer 3

I like god, he is so neat
And he likes to smell my feet
He is good and he is kind
we got in a car crash and I broke my spine
I asked for him to heal my back
but instead I became addicted to crack

Why god, why? I asked the sky
But he doesn't answer, so instead I got high
The preacher says I must give to receive
He says I'm so smart, no way I could be deceived

Then one day I saw praying was useless
and that all the religious threats were toothless
So I became an atheist and everything's fine
and I don't have to give my money to a pixie in the sky

Answer 4

Very good, one area of concern...

"The flower that blooms the birds that sings."

change either to "the bird that sings" or "the birds that sing."

Answer 5

That is very nice - I think that it is so important to write and express yourself. Good for you! You should frame it for your children to keep - it would be a great keepsake to have in the family. :)

Answer 6

A little too mushy for me, but it does rhyme.

Answer 7

much better than the sily one did u make this up cuz it is beautiful

Answer 8

Very pretty! Encore!

Answer 9

how is it that rocked holla at me some time ms.poet

Answer 10

it's nice