AND YOU ASK ME
AND YOU ASK ME
HOW I FEED MY SOUL
HOW MY HAPPINESS BLOOMS
HOW I PERFUME MY GARDEN
LET ME ANSWER YOU
I FEED MY SOUL WITH YOUR SMILE
IT BLOOMS WHENEVER YOU CARESS ME
I PERFUME IT WITH YOUR AROMAS
AND YOUR YOU ASK ME
HOW CAN YOU FEED YOUR SOUL
HOW CAN YOU BLOOM YOUR HAPPINESS
HOW CAN YOU PERFUME YOUR GARDEN
LET ME ANSWER YOU
YOU CAN FEED YOUR SOUL WITH MY POEMS
BLOOM YOUR HAPPINESS WITH MY TENDER CARESSES
BUT LOVE, YOU MUST PERFUME YOUR OWN GARDEN
BECAUSE THERE IS NOTHING MORE DELICIOUS
THAT THE FRAGANCE OF YOUR NAKED SOUL
2006-07-22 16:50:02 · 13 answers · asked by Anonymous in Family & Relationships ➔ Singles & Dating
very beautiful and touching
2006-07-22 16:53:30 · answer #1 · answered by dabugster20 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
The last few lines are good- starting with the line -
But love, you must prefume your own garden.......
The poetry above that is choppy and could be thrown together by a child. If the poem were like the last few lines it would be quality.It could be worked on so that it flows better when the words flow together Asking a question every line doesn't let the words flow well.
Keep writting
2006-07-23 00:00:32 · answer #2 · answered by clcalifornia 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Seems like a rock song - a slow creepy sounding rock song. Send the lyrics to korn =)
but you're right, girls do like poems and such. It doesnt matter how good the poem is, just as long as it shows the guy spent time thinking of something just for them.
2006-07-22 23:55:31 · answer #3 · answered by nolyad69 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Nice. Pretty deep poem, so yeh, its gotta be for someone you didnt just meet. naked soul? Hot. whoever you wrote it for is lucky to know a guy thats seems to go a little deeper than just the surface.
2006-07-23 00:06:46 · answer #4 · answered by claye22 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
this one seems too flowerly, like you're trying to impress them too much. just be honest and stop trying to hard. i love poetry and writing, and from experience i can say that people appreciate it a heck of a lot more when you just say what you mean instead of trying to condense it. email me, maybe we can share some of our stuff and give tips. that'd be cool.
2006-07-22 23:53:57 · answer #5 · answered by jamie_unsolved 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Someone that loves you will like this poem. Since I don't know you I'll just say....wow you wrote a poem.
2006-07-22 23:55:31 · answer #6 · answered by daljack -a girl 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
don't get me wrong or any thing I like getting poems from boys but that one was deep and I did not like it that much. I am sure you can write better poems.
hope I helped
2006-07-23 00:35:29 · answer #7 · answered by sexychic 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
it's slightly creepy for a new gf, but great for someone who you've known for a while, say, a year or more.
2006-07-22 23:53:31 · answer #8 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
Yup it's alright.
2006-07-22 23:53:25 · answer #9 · answered by dccuttie75 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
i like poetry
but that one sucked. sorry hun im just being honest!
2006-07-22 23:52:58 · answer #10 · answered by tessie 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋