Morbidly curious I watch as the puddle grows.
Slipping the blade deeper I find my release.
Physical replacing emotional,
My pain for once released!
I cant help but watch as the puddle grows.
I only write I do not cut!!!
2006-07-21 21:41:53 · 13 answers · asked by Anonymous in Family & Relationships ➔ Singles & Dating
Keep trying, some day you will start talking sense.
I am very optimistic.
2006-07-21 21:47:50 · answer #1 · answered by Saadi 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I dont really get any picture from this. maybee add something describing the room your in, or the time of day. Give me something to paint a picture of you emotional state. you sound like a freak"no offense" add something like The hands on the clock stop when i think about death----my flowers were once red and yellow, my pain and sorrow has suck all the color out of my life etc it would be really sweet if you tied that poem in with a poem about how you feel about rain or something else to really really get some ones attention and say. that's beautiful or my got that's touching,
2006-07-22 05:05:33 · answer #2 · answered by Jonas V 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I think that your a poet. you have great emotional insight... also allot of the time artist are both poets and freaks. I know I'm a freak and I am also an artist. Keep writing but promise that you wont cut yourself it's really dangerous.
2006-07-22 04:46:54 · answer #3 · answered by Teen Talking2teens 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Many poets and people who know the bliss and pain of love may or may not understand you.
Copywrite your work...
Herad of a little band called AFI or NIN or Samshing pumpkins-
or peots like Silvia Plath.
It is better to express yourself on paper than really hurting yourself or someone...
2006-07-22 04:47:21 · answer #4 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
You're an aspiring poet. I wouldn't quite call you a poet yet. Sometimes writing can be an expression of things around you or ideas formed from them, not always things hidden inside you.
2006-07-23 01:16:37 · answer #5 · answered by Joan McBitch 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
When I was a teen, I wrote things like that too. Just try not to dwell on such things. It's normal to have morbid thoughts... It's what you Do with them that makes the difference! It's ok to possess such thoughts as long as we don't allow them to possess Us. Also, I am Very thankful you said it is only on paper, not something you really do.
2006-07-22 04:53:47 · answer #6 · answered by EUDORA 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Whats wrong with mere thoughts?As long as you do not act on them.Your normal!!
2006-07-22 04:45:58 · answer #7 · answered by blondie 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Good work man
Keep on going
â¥
2006-07-22 04:47:57 · answer #8 · answered by Clark794 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I think some tissues would help.
2006-07-22 04:49:52 · answer #9 · answered by ElderStud 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
woooooooooooooo
great great thing
wonderful work sweety
keeep it up
2006-07-22 04:48:10 · answer #10 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋