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2006-07-21 20:43:50 · 11 answers · asked by Anonymous in Society & Culture ➔ Languages
It's great,you have got my comments,in futcher would like to read more about your poems.
2006-07-21 21:01:28 · answer #1 · answered by lucky s 7 · 1⤊ 0⤋
how can I comment on how someone feels? A poem is a verbal expression of emotion. This one does it. 10/10.
I felt what you feel, I could see her in my mind.
hope it goes well.
P.S. I think the idiosyncratic grammar contributes to this poem.
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2006-07-21 20:50:45 · answer #2 · answered by XT rider 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I study a tremendous kind of professional poems yet your is the acceptable poem I surely have ever study, no shaggy dog tale. desire it receives revealed. the only component that i discover incorrect about it is the only accurate sentence, I hate it. each little thing above is the option of what i really recommend, yet hi, seem on the brightside, the only accurate section above isnt so undesirable.
2016-10-15 01:53:10 · answer #3 · answered by ? 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Not poetry. Lovesick yowl more like it. And at the very end, it seems you changed your mind and chose someone else. Sheeeeeshhhh. Freaky.
2006-07-21 20:51:45 · answer #4 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
Hmmmm ok. Thoughts are very good but need to be arranged and decorated with proper words.
2006-07-21 20:54:40 · answer #5 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
You make a woman feel that where there is love, there is a person out there that can help her to know and feel love because of you...
2006-07-21 20:52:44 · answer #6 · answered by tropical breeze 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
it's very nice but some of the grammar needs to be fixed because it doesn't all make sense the way it is now...
2006-07-21 20:48:17 · answer #7 · answered by ss98 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I little bit repetitive, but very well done!
2006-07-21 20:48:07 · answer #8 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
use grammar well, have a deeper point, use poetry, take some classes, use grammar well, use grammar well
2006-07-21 20:48:01 · answer #9 · answered by fury1162 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
wow
2006-07-21 20:46:13 · answer #10 · answered by La_La_Love 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋