"Sharing"
Special moments events that will occur in our life, moments that will stay in our minds for ever, every little detail of every second of everyday that is what i would share with you, and a lot of other things that might not seem important but makes big difference in peoples life's.
By,
Johnny Lee
2006-07-19 12:00:51 · 23 answers · asked by jtlee522 1 in Family & Relationships ➔ Singles & Dating
i like it and that is mine
When you love someone so deep inside,
It seems like it’s so easy to hide,
You’ve loved him for so very long,
You would think he could do no wrong.
Every day you would hope and pray,
That he would always stay this way,
He treated you like you should be treated,
You thought your life was finally completed.
One night he was so sweet to you,
You thought all those thing were maybe untrue,
Two days later he was back the same,
You thought you were the one to blame.
You thought that you would marry him someday,
But this time god wanted to get his way,
You wanted things back how they were before,
But you know this couldn’t happen anymore.
It was Saturday night about ten o’clock,
You heard the news and it wasn’t a shock,
You knew this was going to happen soon,
As you laid there and cried in the pale lit moon.
2006-07-19 12:08:53 · answer #1 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 0⤋
You obviosly have a great amount of passion; and that is a sparse trait in today's society. I think your poem was very heartfelt.
2006-07-19 12:04:37 · answer #2 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
I love poems especially life poem but yours wasn't exactly that good, but I applause you for the effort.
2006-07-19 12:03:31 · answer #3 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
It's alright, try using more metaphors and similes. It sound's to formal, poems don't have to be formal because you don't have to be formal to get the emotions inside into words.
2006-07-19 12:03:51 · answer #4 · answered by song no one singz 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
It's sweet like you :) Just hearing that want to make up??
2006-07-19 12:12:58 · answer #5 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
not bad i have one thats for my gf its probly corny im not good at this stuff i just want her to not hate me.
your eyes the catch me .
you smile it lifts me .
your arms they hold me.
you hold me up and i need you.
please dont let go.
love,
Jon Jon
2006-07-19 12:09:43 · answer #6 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
thats a very good poem
2006-07-19 12:04:48 · answer #7 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
it's not really a poem but kind of cute (for a guy)
2006-07-19 12:04:45 · answer #8 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
Good job.
2006-07-19 12:03:17 · answer #9 · answered by goddess17 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I love it
2006-07-19 12:23:50 · answer #10 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋