I wrote a poem when I found out my boyfriend might be cheating on me.. I was so upset, I wrote my first poem out of anger.. Here it is and can you guys evaluate it 1-10???
It's called...
What's Up???
What's up with this??
late night calls- from another girl..
who you tryna diss??
If she's just a friend, why do you talk to her the way you talk to me??
For love and honesty, I have to pay the fee??
Why you tell her I'm just your sister if you ain't tryna hit??
You told me I was the only one you was tryna get with...
That's some bulls**t.
I give love and I get back lies,
So I write this poem full of whos, whats, and whys..
Who's that girl you talked to so sweet??
What's so good about her that makes you wanna beat??
Why you lead me into this direction??
You told me you love me, I'll give you a correction...
You was just tryna hit..
That was all some bulls**t....
(by the way, you guys, I didn't let him "hit", thank God!!...)
2006-07-17 15:51:54 · 16 answers · asked by Anonymous in Entertainment & Music ➔ Jokes & Riddles
Gurl I like that. You was getting straight jazzy and sassy with him but it was still classy. I liked how you let him know "What's up". I should've use a couple of lines on some of these stupid dudes out here who just wanted the goodies. Sense some of these dudes out here always want the goodies just let them know they got to be an absolutely good one to get the key to the goody box cause some of them think that the have it but its the wrong key. Thank God that you didn't let him hit cause once you give it up it can be hard to let him go. TRUST ME. Well anyway goodluck and I give you a 100 for that because I feel you gurl.
2006-07-17 16:04:37 · answer #1 · answered by $~*DAT DAMN CHICK*~$ 5 · 2⤊ 1⤋
8 or 9 i liked it
2006-07-17 22:54:56 · answer #2 · answered by memyself 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
i give it a 4...didn't really pull me in, its something i'm gunna ferget completely later on...if its something i can remember later..its usually vry vry good, but for a first poem, its pretty well done..keep writing, it'll get better the more you do
2006-07-17 22:54:58 · answer #3 · answered by matrix15sam 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Very good!! 10
2006-07-17 22:53:48 · answer #4 · answered by knifelvr 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I think you have a song, there! I'll give you a 10, too.
2006-07-17 22:59:43 · answer #5 · answered by lavenderbluelassie 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
im a girl but i rate that 10
2006-07-17 22:56:12 · answer #6 · answered by no 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Glad you didn't let him "hit!" I give it a 9
2006-07-17 22:59:35 · answer #7 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
wow pretty good, lol, but why is it in the jokes section, its a nice poem though
2006-07-17 22:55:14 · answer #8 · answered by Late-Nite 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
It's cute! I'd give it an 8.
2006-07-17 22:54:39 · answer #9 · answered by Jasmine Lily 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
i like it!! 10
2006-07-17 22:56:24 · answer #10 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋