This isn't about me. It's about a friend. ANY feedback would be nice. Thx!
You contradict yourself and are feeling perplexed
You stand on the train tracks and wonder what's next
You think of all the words that were left unsaid
While your whole life runs through your head
Then slowly, two Rivers form without a drop of rain
Two reminders of all the pain
With every tear another hope starts shattering
But it'll be over soon, the tracks are rattling
Mind and heart both start batteling
One says stay and the other says run from the clattering
The train now 500 feet away
You decide it's better not to stay
You realize that your life is still so young
It has hardly just begun
2006-07-15 20:09:58 · 9 answers · asked by Anonymous in Education & Reference ➔ Quotations
I enjoyed it very much. It managed to bring forth a message, while having artistic merit as well. Good luck in your future poetic endeavours!
2006-07-15 20:15:03 · answer #1 · answered by Lucas! 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Sounds desperate, yet hopeful. A plea for help or a creative poet in the making. The writing could be improved, assuming that the bastard stays away from the tracks or any other danger...Bless their little heart.
2006-07-16 03:14:44 · answer #2 · answered by ••Mott•• 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Beautiful.
2006-07-16 05:51:49 · answer #3 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
Did you write this? It's really good. Sad, but good.
Get your friend some help.
2006-07-15 20:15:04 · answer #4 · answered by Mary* 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
u have poetry running through ur veins
gr8 job
2006-07-15 20:20:39 · answer #5 · answered by NJ 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
your friend needs your help
2006-07-15 20:18:01 · answer #6 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
makes u think, i gotta show it to my friend
2006-07-15 20:17:08 · answer #7 · answered by algarafolo_1 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
it tells me a lot
2006-07-15 20:13:53 · answer #8 · answered by Hibernating Ladybird 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
donno where you got this- or wrote it yourself- but it is very good !
2006-07-15 20:15:21 · answer #9 · answered by destiny 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋