That womans my mother:
A lady standing strong and tough,
Who still stood standing,
When all things got rough.
A woman of courage and passion for love,
Kept her strong in hr faith,
too her lord up above.
That womans my mother,
With eyes made of brass,
A smile full of diamonds,
A heart pure at last.
I send her my love,
through the soft swaying wind,
and along with my love,my prayers i will send.
I'M blessed with her wisdom,
and warmth of her heart,
the touch of her love,
when were far apart.
Soon I will see her,
in my arms she will rest,
and again she will make it,
through one of God's test.
2006-07-11 16:10:03 · 16 answers · asked by LDW 1 in Society & Culture ➔ Religion & Spirituality
thank you for all the answers i am recieving so far.I posted this poem,because my daughter wrote this for me.She has such a God given talent and i just wanted to show her what other's honestly thought.keep the answers coming please and again i thank everyone who has responded.God bless each and everyone of you.LISA
2006-07-12 21:07:16 · update #1
i like it, its really good. you should give it to your mom. keep writing!
2006-07-11 16:14:02 · answer #1 · answered by listener 2 · 1⤊ 0⤋
Very nice sentiment. Rythm and meter are off a little, and it could also stand a little grammar help, despite the fact that poetry occassionally suspends the rules of grammar, but with consistency. Don't give it up, a little more work and the awkward flow will smooth out. All good poets and writers edit and re-edit their works.
2006-07-12 00:22:24 · answer #2 · answered by billz 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Aside from all the errors in spelling, grammar, and punctuation, I was able to comprehend that you miss your deceased mother. Honestly speaking, your poem needs a lot of work
2006-07-11 23:23:12 · answer #3 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
It appears to be about Mary, the mother of Jesus, with a definite Roman Catholic slant.
What do I think of it?
It seems hearfelt and sincere, a good work.
2006-07-11 23:17:14 · answer #4 · answered by steve 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Good job! Just some spelling errors. it should be "when we're far apart" and "through one of God's tests."
So what is this test you are referring to? Cuz the only time I've seen God test poeple is just to test their faith.
2006-07-11 23:14:48 · answer #5 · answered by Chris K 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Honestly - it's not very good but your mother will love it as it shows your love for her.
2006-07-11 23:21:54 · answer #6 · answered by N F 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
You seem to be venerating her like the Catholics do the virgin mary. Don't take your eyes off Jesus. He is where she is, and who looks after her.
2006-07-11 23:22:34 · answer #7 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
Beautiful. You must really love your mother.
2006-07-11 23:17:26 · answer #8 · answered by Debra M. Wishing Peace To All 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
amazing,i think that u love ur mother so much,so do i.my relgion and the prophet Muahmmed(PBUH) ordered us to obey our parents in order to go to pradise.mammy is yht most beautiful person in my life,sure i love the Propjet(PBUH) morethan her.
2006-07-12 00:39:26 · answer #9 · answered by lady 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
that is the most beautiful poem ive ever read! you have a wonderful skill! im sure yer mom is feeling so proud. thats a great piece & you should get it published! it gave me goosebumps lol! :)
2006-07-11 23:15:58 · answer #10 · answered by wonderwoman 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
beautifully and soulfully written. It is lovely and has so much emotion in it. nice imaging too.
2006-07-11 23:16:15 · answer #11 · answered by reicharua 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋