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2006-07-11 01:57:43 · 8 answers · asked by Anonymous in Society & Culture ➔ Languages
I kinda liked the idea, but it was very sad. It makes me feel sorry for you, in a way...Like you are not happy. Cant you have the pen write about happy things, too? I guess it would not send as much feeling that way...Oh well. It was ok.
2006-07-11 02:03:50 · answer #1 · answered by skigod377 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I very much enjoyed reading your poem which gives deep insight into your feelings and your soul. My comment would be that you show much promise but need to keep learning English, spelling and grammar and you should know when to capitalize letters such as the proper noun "I" which you type in lower-case "i".
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2006-07-11 09:05:06 · answer #2 · answered by GeneL 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I dislike all that poetry that has no a good rhyme. It looks like a lazy poetry to me. Maybe you should go to prose. I think you'd do better.
2006-07-11 09:20:39 · answer #3 · answered by kamelåså 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Depressing....? Take it easy there Edgar Allen Poe.
2006-07-11 09:07:38 · answer #4 · answered by mixmastermark02 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
If I knew what a cooment was, I would...
2006-07-11 09:00:48 · answer #5 · answered by unrealkrusty 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Do yourself and your family a favour: don't quit your job!
2006-07-11 09:01:01 · answer #6 · answered by paliminka 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
It's good but sad!! perhaps, you can add some life to it!!
2006-07-11 10:48:00 · answer #7 · answered by braich_gal 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
a little dark and gloomly .. do something upbeat
2006-07-11 09:03:22 · answer #8 · answered by Clyde 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋