INCOMPLETE WITHOUT YOUR EMBRANCE
every time i think of u
it starts raining
drawning me in pain
my life is moored
theres noyhing i can see
but without u
might have never known love
thanks to u
as they say when in true love
i find u everywhere
in fragnance of cloth
flower in my garden,your smile
shine in your eyes,the burning candle
u feel so close
i love this illusion
still everything is so painful
i am incomplete without your embrance
may god give you everything u desire.
your thoughts are valueable .
2006-07-10 11:24:50 · 6 answers · asked by Anonymous in Family & Relationships ➔ Singles & Dating
you definetly have talent in writing poetry. this poem honestly gave me chills. keep on writing as your nickname suits you!!!justicejamie888
2006-07-10 11:30:53 · answer #1 · answered by justicejamie888 3 · 1⤊ 0⤋
I think it sounds pretty bland. I know people who write poetry as hobbies, they write with emotion. When I read that poem u put up, iIdon't FEEL anything, it has no spice and is way too bland.
Also, the other guy here suggests u stole the poem from an Earth, Wind and Fire song. Also, u spell really badly.
2006-07-10 18:35:40 · answer #2 · answered by Ava_Marie_Prescott 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I think this poem is really really good do you write alot of poetry?
2006-07-10 18:29:57 · answer #3 · answered by Victoria V 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
thats really good you should send it in to one of those poerty contest.my mom did that and they put in in a book.......check it out
2006-07-10 18:32:21 · answer #4 · answered by dede2772 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
its pretty good, it could use a lil more spice
2006-07-10 18:28:28 · answer #5 · answered by MizzJ 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
earth wind and fire!
2006-07-10 18:31:23 · answer #6 · answered by theblackbeatles 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋