sometimes i feel like i should quit
im tired of having jealousy fits
i keep waiting and waiting
trying to find the right group
the right group to accept me
accepting me for who i am
im sick of being rejected
no one knows how much it hurts
guys that i like
never want to come near me
know that i told them the truth, hurts
but it only seems that even that wasnt enough
i will admit theres people that care
but they never show it
so i never know it
all i want and ever wanted
is girls but especialy guys
to see me and how special i realy am.
2006-07-10 04:46:56 · 28 answers · asked by Anonymous in Family & Relationships ➔ Singles & Dating
it seems very sincere and personal..that always makes for a good poem...it reminds me of a
hard lesson i had to learn "real friends are hard to come by" and trust God and ur family to be there for you ... but dont wait around for ppl to like u and accept you...just be u..if they like u good..if they dont..oh well!
friends are nice but not always a necessity--no matter what ppl say-- but above all ..always...be careful who u trust! Be selective! Uve probably heard it b4 but its soo true!
2006-07-10 05:01:12 · answer #1 · answered by PrettyBright 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
You are way too depressing. Stop writing poems and feeling sorry for yourself and actually go out and make friends. It seems like you expect people to come up to you and be your friend. Well sweetie life doesn't work that way. You need to take the initiative and feeling sorry for yourself isn't the way to go about it.
2006-07-10 11:51:06 · answer #2 · answered by shakia27 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
It's good as far as poetry goes, sad and depressing but the flow really expresses how you are feeling. I hope the chance comes where you will have reason to express joy and heppiness because someone has seen how bright your spirit is.
Best of luck to you.
2006-07-10 11:51:05 · answer #3 · answered by swordsmanoflight21 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I read your poem and it very to the point..I only hope you don't feel that way...You sound so sad. Don't worry, you will find the right group of people to hang with and accept you for you. Good luck
2006-07-10 11:50:38 · answer #4 · answered by linda 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
do me just one favor...look in the mirror and tell yourself that you are worthy of every single thing you want. tell yourself you are special because you can think and feel.
everything you cite in your poem is meaningful and passionate and shows you feel alienated.
you have to find how special you are from within and just be yourself. don't reject yourself, accept yourself so that others may accept you too. Forgive yourself for your humanity so that others may forgive you too.
Keep working on your poetry, because you have the expressive part just right.
2006-07-10 11:52:41 · answer #5 · answered by rightonrighton 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
It's a nice little note but not much poetry. I am not an expert but I thought every couple of lines needed to ryme.
2006-07-10 11:51:41 · answer #6 · answered by fairlane66gta 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Needs work! I understand your expressions and think that you have beautiful things to say. But, think outside the box and try and express yourself with a little more poetry
2006-07-10 11:51:24 · answer #7 · answered by arenaimage 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
that was good i write too but you know most poems have a layer of truth so is there any thing you wanna talk about e-mail me i love to help
2006-07-10 11:50:43 · answer #8 · answered by ACE 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
i didnt read it, i got to like the first two words and I knew it was crap. But dont give up. Write about topics such as death,drug use and genocide and you will be on your way to being a great poet.
2006-07-10 11:49:00 · answer #9 · answered by ? 3 · 0⤊ 1⤋
not tring to be mean the rhymes are weak if you want to be notice than be a little more aggresive and try to relate to other situations and show actual pain
2006-07-10 11:51:16 · answer #10 · answered by hedonic penchant for graffiti 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋