what do think of these poems?

Question

i wrote them

So many songs,
So many poems,
So many movies,
So many words,
So many thoughts,
So many books,
To describe my love,
None of them will do,
For someone as special as you.


I sit here quietly and watch the sunset,
Thinking of someone that I’ve never met,
I wonder does he think of me too,
Needless to say I am thinking of you.
Wanting to hold you, to see your face,
To take you away to a better place,
You feel so right, too good to be true,
I just can’t stop thinking of you.
My friends say that I might regret,
Losing my heart to a boy I’ve not met,
I say there is nothing I can do,
I cannot help thinking of you.
I believe you were made special for me,
But wonder if that could possibly be,
I’m tired of being so alone and blue,
But I always smile when I’m thinking of you,

Answer 1

The poems are well done, maintain a steady rythem, and have strong emotional themes that a person could relate to. However, sometime you might want to try using a more complex rhyme scheme to better showcase the poem or rely less on the rhyme scheme in order for the reader to see the other elements better (i.e. rythem, alliteration, whatev) and have more of a balanced smooth feel in the poem. Overall I think it rocks though and shows great potential!

Answer 2

I prefer your first poem. End-rhyming can get too moon,june,tune and the sentiment of the poem is often lost. Lots of people think that a poem is not a poem at all unless it rhymes. You might try expressing yourself in free-verse, with inner rhyme as a challenge. I am an archived poet and have given lots of poetry workshops. It is always good to express yourself in a poem and never throw bits and pieces away, as just when one does , appropriate lines arrive. Thank you for sharing your work.

Answer 3

Awwww them poems was so sweet and beautiful. I write poems too girl and I'm thinking about doing the same thing putting them on here too. They were really cute especially the last one.

Answer 4

i like the second one, but instead of putting
My friends say that I might regret,
Losing my heart to a boy I’ve not met,

try putting
My friends say that somehow i'll regret,
losing my heart to a boy i have not met.

Answer 5

I think you should try less to rhyme and just let the words and thoughts flow. Conventional "poetry rules" will only hold back your creativity.

Answer 6

They are really good! you should published them or something! maybe later I post some of my so you can give me your opinion on my poems!? Keep writing more poems you might have an opportunity later in life!

Answer 7

Love them. They have a lot of emotion

Answer 8

awwww i really like them they are very cute

Answer 9

i like them u should be a poet

Answer 10

that;'s cute. really cute