do you like my poem (again but dif. poem)?

Question

you put a smile on your face
to hide whats inside

you try to hide but it's stopping you
what is it it's no letting you go

it's pulling you back
you have to face it

it wont let you run it stares you down
it looks at you

you look away it pulls you back
it makes you face it

you look at
but you don't want to

you try to get away
it's grasp on you thickens

you scream but no one can hear yoU
your alone with it

what is it
why is it holding you
why won't it let you go

you have to face it
what is it
what is it
what is it......

Answer 1

Coming from a female fellow poetry writer. I think it's pretty good for a deep poem. Sound like you were thinking of some sadder moments that you needed to release. That's a good thing.
Only point I'd say.....Put a title on it. Make's it more memorable. Sometimes ending with the title too.......keeps it in the reader head even more because you've just put an emphasis on your thoughts.

Keep writin' Curious........it's very therapeutic to ones being!!
Click on my name if you ever feel like sharin' more.......we'll swap
thoughts of the matter!

Take care
SmileyCat : )

Answer 2

A lot of potential! Keep expressing yourself. Its a great way to vent and release your creativity. You ought to pick up the guitar and put these to music.

Answer 3

Great poem...very intense but it is kinda the typical teenage poem. Keep working hard tho :)

Answer 4

Typical teenage angst poetry. I think a wrote that one myself in high school

Answer 5

Is it your past? You can never run away from it. You can only deal with it, or try and drink or smoke it away (that last thing doesn't work though).

Answer 6

yeah that really good. you should put your name after your poems so we could use them and quote you by it

Answer 7

mm i have seen better but it is pretty good by the way what is it?

Answer 8

I like it.

Answer 9

so many answers, makes you think......I enjoyed it !!!!

Answer 10

Luv it :)