Heart Mind and Soul
Inside my mind, inside my soul, there lays a heart, pure as gold. But my whole life I never saw the three of them get along. My mind and soul would disagree, my heart stayed out of the way, untill I finally met you, oh what a faithful day. My mind and soul agreed, my heart beat extra fast. All I could think of was ''will this feeling last?'' I knew right then I needed you, forever and foremore, this is what I needed someone that I cared for. Everyday and every night I dreamed of you. This feeling was crazy, this feeling was knew. Inside my mind, inside my soul, there lays a heart, pure as gold, but when they all agree I feel disbelief. What made me do it I still know, it was all because of my heart mind and soul, I talked to you, you didn't like me one bit. I cried that night feeling all alone, and now I know to never trust my heart mind or soul.
2006-07-06 09:46:25 · 14 answers · asked by Chambo25 2 in Beauty & Style ➔ Other - Beauty & Style
awwwwwwww i love it!i write poems and that is a definite 96 on a scale of 100
2006-07-06 09:50:32 · answer #1 · answered by fansie 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Overall .. 75.. to tell you the truth. However, I think it has great bones and after a few more rewrites it would be much better. The beginning was good. The middle and end got kind of muddled for me and lacked flow.
I've been teaching for 22 years.
Good luck, keep working!
2006-07-06 16:54:45 · answer #2 · answered by jilli 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
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2006-07-06 16:50:50 · answer #3 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
i love the meaning. you have a great start on being emo if u wanted to be. it didnt flow at points in it.b more descriiptive like instead of one bit use more deep words. i say 72.
2006-07-06 17:07:06 · answer #4 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
Being someone who writes poetry myself, i give it a 90. the emotion in it really speaks. Are you depressed or just hurt?
2006-07-06 17:00:48 · answer #5 · answered by angeleyes_7795 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I think that it is a 10 because I like poetry
2006-07-06 16:50:38 · answer #6 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
Awww thats like a 95ish! Thats really good!
2006-07-06 18:19:05 · answer #7 · answered by coolchick8778 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Its wonderful are you a bit depressed (69)
2006-07-06 16:50:57 · answer #8 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
Wow..... you can really feel the emotion. I give you a 92.
2006-07-06 16:55:50 · answer #9 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
i hate to burst your bubble, but it sounds like you are trying too hard. sorry.
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2006-07-06 16:50:41 · answer #10 · answered by why do i? 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋