Is this understandable?

Question

Reliability of communication Technology


Communication technology has changed for better reliability. Many people depend on the new technology ever day. Cordless technology makes life easier. There is more space to store information.
Many people depend on being able to communicate .With new technology they are able to fully rely on their technology working. Such as in an On Star car, people are able to depend on, On Star knowing when there has been an accident. By using a device to communicate with the person/people in the car, On Star is bale to determine if they need to call for paramedics. With the evolution of technology people are able to work from home and do more than one thing at once.
Modern technology is a lot easier than corded unreliable technology. No cords insures no tripping over cords and breaking the product. No more pets being wrapped in the cords. It also insures portability. Wireless products are easier to carry with you to class, a board meeting, and even around the house.
Information storage is made smaller. Instead of using a floppy disk , that has a low limitation of storage ,people are able to use flash drives. Flash drives have a high level of storage room. Which happens to be small enough to put on a key chain .Now families that had crowded hard drives can all stores their information simply on their own flash drive? With this smaller technology people are about to rely on saving more.
Many large companies find it easier to convert their communication technology to modern forms. A delivery server used to use a manual route book to save sales, people, and time. The company tried using “a modern way “.A mobile computer system , replaced the old way and made their work a lot easier , reliable , and faster.

Answer 1

Recently, communication technology has changed for the better with focuses on reliability and convenience. Imrovements are constantly necessary because many people depend on the new technology daily.

Many people's daily activities depend on communication. With new advances in reliability they are able to fully rely on their communications tools. Such as in a car equipped with OnStar, people are able to depend on On Star knowing when there has been an accident. By using a device to communicate with the person/people in the car, On Star is able to determine if they need to call paramedics.

With the evolution of technology people are able to work from home and do more than one thing at once. Modern wireless technology is much more convenient than conventional corded technology. No cords eliminates tripping and the associated problems arrising from such a fall. Not to mention the fact that no more pets will be wrapped up in the cords. Wireless technology also enhances portability. Wireless products are easier to carry with you to class, a board meeting, and even around the house.

Information storage has also become smaller. Instead of using a floppy disk, which has a low storage limit, people are able to use flash drives. Flash drives have a high storage capacity, which happens to be small enough to put on a key chain. Now families that had crowded hard drives can all store their information simply on their own flash drive. With this smaller technology people can rely on saving more(HOW??).

Many large companies find it easier to convert their communication technology to modern forms. Once the transition has been made to the upgraded system, most companies find that the time and energy saved is well worth the added expense.

In summary, as communication technology improves, so will the standard of living for all who rely on their benefits.

(A delivery server used to use a manual route book to save sales, people, and time. The company tried using “a modern way “.A mobile computer system , replaced the old way and made their work a lot easier , reliable , and faster. - CONSIDER EDITTING THIS)

Answer 2

That's good. But I would write

"Such as in an On Star car, people are able to depend on, On Star knowing when there has been an accident. By using a device to communicate with the person/people in the car, On Star is bale to determine if they need to call for paramedics."

as

"Such is the case in an OnStar-equipped car. People are able to depend on OnStar when there has been an accident. By using a device to communicate with the person or persons in the car, OnStar can determine if they need to call for paramedics, then they are able to make the call."

Other than that, I think it's perfectly understandable.

Hope that helps :)

Answer 3

I understand the piece is about technology, but you way over used the word "technology". And it doesn't flow well. Very hard to read. I get the point, but you need to pull your sentences together better.

Answer 4

Congratulations on writing your own text instead of stealing off the internet. 10/10.

Although there are a few grammatical issues in the piece, I think you demonstrate very well that you understand the subject.

good luck

Answer 5

Yes, it is understandabl, but you need to clean up your typo's by using spell check. You continue to speak on the same thing in all of your paragraph's. By cleaning these thing's up would make it 100% perfect.

It's VERY GOOD!

Answer 6

understandable? yes

But it does need some major editing. You need to make your paragraphs more cohesive, try to have only one main idea per paragraph and stick to it. Dont make all your sentances so short and choppy. You also have many incomplete sentances, sentances that add little or no information to the paragraph, and poor punctuation usage.

Answer 7

Yes, I understand it, but the content still contradicts your thesis statement . . . Perhaps you should change your thesis statement to say that it has become more convenient? . . .

Answer 8

how many times are you going to ask this?

Answer 9

yes it is understandable

Answer 10

sure, it is easy to understand.