you held me so close
like you didn't want to
suddenly you drop me down and say
honey I don't think we'll last this round
i've lost my breath
I can't keep up with you
I don't know what were racing for anymore
maybe you do
but I don't have a clue
the summer won't last for our love
so just give it up
give me up
you'll for get me anyways
don't let this control your decisions
don't base it all on this
keep your lover
bg: as in me
close
and your tears away from me
bg: I'm afraid
how could you have the nerve to say that
summers ending not the world
how could you have the nerve to think that
did you plan it word by word?
so I'll say something hurtful and simple
but the words won't come out
cause' they just don't fit into place
and all I wish is to be okay...
without you
thinking should I hate you
never could
cuz summer love lasts forever
but thats all you'll ever be x2
summer love
bg:lasts forever
all you'll ever be x2
is invisible to me
2006-07-04 08:29:33 · 11 answers · asked by nadia 3 in Entertainment & Music ➔ Music
Cool. I can't hear the tune though so I can' t make an exact decision. The thing that stood out at me the most were the words, "summers ending". You should write that in as the bridge. Something like, "La La La, Summers Ending, La La La Stop Pretending...We won't see la la la dee dee, and your words can set me free...La La La, You held me close, La La La, Handed me a Rose.... blah blah etc...". And maybe make that the title "Summers Ending". good luck.
2006-07-04 08:39:19 · answer #1 · answered by Spirit-X 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Cool
2006-07-04 15:34:26 · answer #2 · answered by miss_gem_01 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Not sure cant tell without the music. There is a problem with rhyming in some places
2006-07-04 15:33:41 · answer #3 · answered by charmaine m 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
It was kind of bland for me. Maybe with music it would sound alright. It's a little juvenile.
2006-07-04 15:59:31 · answer #4 · answered by awakeinacoma_22 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
thats just a poem, we'd ahve to hear the music to judge it as a song
2006-07-04 15:31:53 · answer #5 · answered by Craig O 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Aww wow i think its really good! i wish i could write songs lol.
2006-07-04 15:33:07 · answer #6 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
That is a very good choice of phrases..I like it...do you have music to it?
2006-07-04 15:32:23 · answer #7 · answered by Confusion With a K 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Great job! How long did that take you?I really like it!
2006-07-04 15:33:23 · answer #8 · answered by miss ingie 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
it is a cool song and good lyrics
2006-07-04 15:37:54 · answer #9 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
nice
2006-07-04 15:31:13 · answer #10 · answered by Shelly 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋