I feel like walls are closing in,
My world is so small,
Breathing,
Isn’t a given,
Hold me close as our last hours,
Seep through,
The edges my broken heart,
I am falling apart,
I can’t take this anymore,
Before I start to become nothing,
But something that clings to you,
And I can’t say this sublime,
But I can say it true,
I love you,
2006-07-04 08:09:12 · 17 answers · asked by Anonymous in Entertainment & Music ➔ Music
that is a really good song though i wish i could here the melody. i like it
2006-07-04 08:11:11 · answer #1 · answered by deleted. 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Mmmm, the start is amazingly effective.. yet then it starts off to sound style of like a brilliant-unfold, elementary pop music approximately love. yet perhaps that's what you're aiming for. you have written it nicely, however. :) i like this section.. i will hear somebody sing it already: and that i enjoyed you for you, and not for the previous You didn’t love me for me, and we didn’t final and that i wrote you a love music, as silly as i replaced into I did it via fact I enjoyed you and that i did it via fact
2016-11-01 04:58:16 · answer #2 · answered by ? 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
OMG Yes I would so listen to it, and you are a natural at writing lyrics. You should keep it up, because you are great!!!
love always,
Sammie
2006-07-04 08:13:07 · answer #3 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
its not bad at all, but may i say it sounds more like a poem whe nit gets near the end... but its pretty good, keep up to great work
2006-07-10 07:28:47 · answer #4 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
Yawn!
2006-07-04 08:12:00 · answer #5 · answered by 4 strings 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
it's okay try to make it longer and use more original wording rather than whats already been said
2006-07-04 08:13:11 · answer #6 · answered by nadia 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Yeah I'd say that's pretty good!
2006-07-04 08:14:21 · answer #7 · answered by miss_gem_01 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
that is so beautiful, i love it, i think it could b a #1 hit, ill give it a ten, no a 20, i love it, its real beautiful, no lie!!!!!!!
2006-07-04 08:14:47 · answer #8 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
it's pretty cool, if a little bit sappy for my tastes
2006-07-04 08:35:26 · answer #9 · answered by bahamadude91 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Keep working on it.
2006-07-04 08:14:22 · answer #10 · answered by ? 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋