I am writing an essay on 'My recess period'.Plz point out my mistakes.?

Question

I am a student of class 5.I want to be a pilot.I go to school daily.I enjoy doing my home work.I attend my classes and listen to my teachers carefully,but the happiest for me and my other class fellows is 'Our recess period'.It is the most favourite period for our teachers also.When we become really tired of study and
bore from classes this break makes us really active.
I spent my recess period by playing games like soccer,bedminton and vollyball.Sometimes I do gossips with my friends.We ususlly go to our school canteen and eat burger,chips,sweets and pepsi.Whenever I feel very hungry I used to eat two burgers.
If my best friend is on holiday ,I go to library and spent my time by readings newspapers and magazines.When I dont able to complete my class work in the period I finished and learn it.
Our teachers do gossips in staff room,some correcting out excercise books and most of them taking refreshment.Everyone feels relax during this period.so I also enjoy alot my recess period.

Answer 1

Sorry,it would take too long to proof read it. Try your spell/grammar check though.

Answer 2

I am a student of class 5. I want to be a pilot. I go to school daily. I enjoy doing my home work. I attend my classes and listen to my teachers carefully, but the happiest for me and my other class fellows is 'Our recess period'. It is the favorite period for our teachers. When we become really tired of study and bored from classes this break makes us really active.

I spent my recess period by playing games like soccer, badminton and volleyball. Sometimes I gossip with my friends. We usually go to our school canteen and eat burgers, chips, sweets and Pepsi. Whenever I feel very hungry I eat two burgers.

If my best friend is on holiday I go to library and spend my time by reading newspapers and magazines. When I am not able to complete my class work in the period, I finish it later.

Our teachers gossip in the staff room, while correcting our exercise books and most of them taking refreshment. Everyone feels relaxed during this period. So I enjoy my recess period a lot.




Here is a form I corrected. You did very well for being in class 5. Some of the errors that you are making are when you have a noun ( a person, place, or thing) you need to make the verb (an action word) agree with it. Such as; I run home is correct, I runs home would not be correct. The use of the word gossip would not be correct to say I gossips; it would be I gossip or he gossip would not be correct it would be he gossips. This is a hard concept for most 5th graders.

Watch your spelling and use a spell checker on a a computer or a dictionary if you are not sure of the spelling of words.

To make the writing more readable watch your spacing a bit when you type. Two spaces after a period and indenting a new paragraph 5 spaces will make your writing easier to read

Good luck with your writing in the future you are off to a good start.

Answer 3

Overall, this was good. You should be pleased. I have put in some extra words and taken out others. I have also corrected some spelling mistakes. I hope you get a good mark for this!

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I am a student of class 5. I want to be a pilot. I go to school daily. I enjoy doing my home work. I attend my classes and listen to my teachers carefully, but the happiest TIME for me and my other FELLOW CLASSMATES is our recess period. It is our teachers favourite period also.

When we become really tired of study and bored from classes, this break makes us really active. I spend my recess period playing games like soccer, badminton and volleyball. Sometimes I gossip with my friends.

We usually go to our school canteen and eat burgers, chips, sweets and Pepsi. Whenever I feel very hungry I eat two burgers.

If my best friend is on holiday, I go to the library and spent my time reading newspapers and magazines. When I AM NOT able to complete my class work in the period, I finish IT and learn it.

Our teachers gossip in THE staff room, some correcting exercise books and most of them taking refreshment.

Everyone feels relaxED during this period. I also enjoy a lot my recess period.

Answer 4

I hope this version meets your teacher's standards!

I am a Year 5 student. I want to be a pilot. I go to school every day. I enjoy doing my homework. I attend my classes and listen to my teachers carefully, but the best part of school for my classmates and me is our recess period. It is also the favourite period for our teachers. When we become tired of studying and bored with classes, this break makes us active.
I spend my recess period playing games like soccer, badminton and volleyball. Sometimes I gossips with my friends. We usually go to our school canteen, eat burger, chips, and sweets, and drink Pepsi. Whenever I feel very hungry, I used to eat two burgers.
If my best friend is on holiday, I go to the library and spent my time reading newspapers and magazines. When I am unable to complete my class work during the lesson, I finish it and learn it during recess. Our teachers go to the staff room and gossip. Some teachers spend recess correcting our exercise books. Most of them have refreshments. Everyone feels relaxed during this recess. Everyone thinks that recess period is the best period of the school day.

Answer 5

some mistakes need correcting:

...It is our TEACHERS' favourite period also...

When we become really tired of STUDYING and bored from classes, this break makes us really active....

We usually go to our school canteen TO eat burgers, chips, sweets and Pepsi. Whenever I feel very hungry I eat two burgers...

Answer 6

As you are computer literate you must be aware of the spell checker provided by Yahoo Answers.

Assuming this is NOT a wind-up try typing your work in WORD where spelling and grammar are automatically checked and suggestions made for changes.

Answer 7

OK spelling mistakes - (I think)

Bedminton = badminton
Gossips = Our teachers gossip (no need for the (s) or do)
Spent my time = and SPEND my time (keep the sentace TENSE the same)

Also start the essay of with:
In this essay I will be informing you of my recces period...

Answer 8

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Answer 9

homework is one word; happiest is not a noun so dont use it as one; bedminton is spelled worng; you dont do gossips - change that; spent should be spent; dont should be am not; out should be our; relax is not an adjectivitve - change to relaxed.

I dont know what grade your in but theres a lot more mistakes that I dont have the time to point out to you.

Answer 10

it's dont be able