CLOAK OF LAUGHTER
I WEAR A CLOAK OF LAUGHTER
LEST ANYONE SHOULD SEE
MY DRESS OF SORROW UNDERNEATH
AND STOP TO PITY ME
I WEAR A CLOAK OF LAUGHTER
LEST ANYONE SHOULD GUESS
THAT WHAT IS HID BENEATH IT
IS LESS THAN HAPPINESS
BUT, AH, WHAT DOES IT MATTER
TO YOU WHO ARE SO WISE?
MY CLOAK FALLS TATTERED AT MY FEET
BEFORE YOUR TENDER EYES.
FOR CLOAKS TO COVER SORROW
ARE MEANT FOR STRANGER FOLK
ONE CANNOT HIDE AWAY FROM FRIENDS
BENEATH A LAUGHING CLOAK
OH, FUTILE CLOAK OF LAUGHTER,
HOW FRAIL YOU ARE AND THIN!
LOVE LOOKS THROUGH YOU SO EASILY
AND SEES THE GRIEF WITHIN.
WRITTEN BY ABIGAIL CRESSON
2006-07-02 06:16:57 · 8 answers · asked by bry7josh 5 in Health ➔ Mental Health
I like... do you mind if i add that to my website.... with our name on it of course
2006-07-02 06:20:16 · answer #1 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
Smile, though your heart is aching
Smile, even though it's breaking
When there are clouds in the sky
You'll get by...
If you smile
With your fear and sorrow
Smile and maybe tomorrow
You'll find that life is still worthwhile if you'll just...
Light up your face with gladness
Hide every trace of sadness
Although a tear may be ever so near
That's the time you must keep on trying
Smile, what's the use of crying
You'll find that life is still worthwhile
If you'll just...
Smile, though your heart is aching
Smile, even though it's breaking
When there are clouds in the sky
You'll get by...
If you smile
Through your fear and sorrow
Smile and maybe tomorrow
You'll find that life is still worthwhile
If you'll just Smile...
That's the time you must keep on trying
Smile, what's the use of crying
You'll find that life is still worthwhile
If you'll just Smile
2006-07-02 06:20:40 · answer #2 · answered by Tommystune 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Not bad, Abigail.
You may want to not reproduce it in all capital letters, however. Also, the meter is regular in some places and not in others. It needs to be more consistent. It seems to want to be alternating lines of iambic tetrameter and iambic trimeter. Give that a try and see what you think.
This is also a bit generalized. I tend to prefer poetry grounded in concrete details. However, overall, this is a nice piece. :)
2006-07-02 06:22:21 · answer #3 · answered by JStrat 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I don't understand this, the question, I mean.
Quite well-written poem, good job if it is written by you. Nice use of rhyme & interesting persona. But the caps definitely take away from the poem.
2006-07-02 06:20:12 · answer #4 · answered by Alqarine 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
omg that was beautiful. to be able to express yourself is something that most people don't have the ability to do, i think you should send it in.. DONT CHANGE A THING
2006-07-02 08:08:37 · answer #5 · answered by lynne_angil 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Ooooooooooooooooooooooooooook then
2006-07-02 06:19:19 · answer #6 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
That is a great poem. So true..
2006-07-02 06:19:27 · answer #7 · answered by EvilFairies 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
*thumbs up*
2006-07-02 06:19:33 · answer #8 · answered by silvs 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋