Sometimes i just wanna reach out to you, just to whisper tender words, so soft, so sweet. sometimes i just wanna hold you close and feel your heartbeat. sometimes i wish you could see the world through my eyes so i can reveal to you my only prize that i keep and dream about in my sleep. to your disprize as my prize if you could only see through my eyes and reveal to you my only prize. to read between all these lies. so they can all die and reveal to you what i see through my eyes, you my only prize, the one i cherish, love, and keep so deep?
2006-07-01 15:50:27 · 15 answers · asked by Anonymous in Arts & Humanities ➔ Other - Arts & Humanities
1 being the lowest ten the highest. tell me a good title for it. also please tell me some suggests to make it better. the title i chose is through my eyes. please dont talk about grammar, because i wrote this poem fast off of feelings inside.
2006-07-01 15:52:17 · update #1
thanks! those answers really helped.
2006-07-01 15:58:51 · update #2
9 and a good title would be "looking through my eyes"
Its very good actually. I am a writer among other things and I was very impressed with piece... Bravo dear, its good
2006-07-01 15:56:02 · answer #1 · answered by Anonymous · 10⤊ 2⤋
Leave out the question mark at the end and you got a middle vote from me 5-6
2006-07-01 15:57:02 · answer #2 · answered by bestwrencher 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I would give it 8 it is really cool and your title could be: Reach out to the World
2006-07-01 15:58:45 · answer #3 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
10!! You should call it....The World Through My Eyes.
2006-07-01 15:54:24 · answer #4 · answered by songbird 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Score 6
Started great, rambled a little and ran out of steam when it needed a bit more.. Could be beautiful.
Title: 'If only you knew the things that I see'
2006-07-01 16:00:41 · answer #5 · answered by mr_tmc2003 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Title: Watch in my eyes.
2006-07-01 22:17:34 · answer #6 · answered by tipool 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I'll give it a 10. It sings and it made me contemplate about feelings and how hard it is to know how well the other understands.
2006-07-01 16:12:44 · answer #7 · answered by Mr. Bodhisattva 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
It's really good and i'm sure that alot of people could relate to it. I give it a perfect 10
2006-07-01 16:32:23 · answer #8 · answered by Lakeshia W 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
You left out the part about the beer and the pimp who is a kungfu master
2006-07-01 15:54:28 · answer #9 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
6, It started off really good till you started using the word prize.
I am truly being honest and not kissing your butt for points!
2006-07-01 15:53:40 · answer #10 · answered by ☼Jims Brain☼ 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋