Here are four :
1. "Seize time, already the first day of July. Still a heap of things to do, he wants to berelax during a brief time, then keep going his habit."
2. "I move to a new address whom is still near my school"
3. "(somebody's name) forsaked me, he didn't come this morning."
4. "Some detailed informations about me, read this at first"
I've tried my best to corret these sentences, there are still some error or some changes possible to improve the language quality ?
2006-07-01 11:55:41 · 8 answers · asked by PHEFRADE 2 in Education & Reference ➔ Primary & Secondary Education
Well, with #2 it should say "which is still near my school" because an address isn't alive.
#4 Should be "information" singular.
#1 ... "he wants to be relaxed..."
I am not sure what you mean by the last part of the first sentence. What is his habit???
HTH
2006-07-01 12:00:21 · answer #1 · answered by MissSubversive 3 · 1⤊ 0⤋
1. Time flies, it's already the first day of July. (Or; seize the day, it is already the first of July.)There are still a heap of things to do. He wants to relax for a brief time, then go back to work. (habit doesn't fit here. You could also say; he wants to relax for a while, then get back into the habit of work.
2. whom is all wrong for this sentence.
I moved to a new address that is still near my school.
3. John has forsaken me....
4. For further details, read this part.
2006-07-01 12:11:25 · answer #2 · answered by mw 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
1. Seize the day, it's already the first of July. There is still a lot to do but he'll relax for a short while first then get going with his chores.
2. I moved to a new address which is still near my school.
3. ....ok
4. But first some detailed information about me.
2006-07-01 12:03:22 · answer #3 · answered by Sunshine 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
He wanted to relax for a brief time, but he needed to seize time as it was already the first of July with a heap of things to do and he wanted to continue his habit.
I moved to a new address, but it is still near my school.
Edward didn't come this morning and I was forsaken.
First, read this detailed information about me.
2006-07-01 12:05:09 · answer #4 · answered by tobinmbsc 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Here are my thoughts of one way to restate the sentences.
1. "Seize time, already the first day of July. Still a heap of things to do, he wants to berelax during a brief time, then keep going his habit."
Corrected
"There are many things to do and its already the first day of July, so perhaps he should relax a moment and then continue with his habit."
2. "I move to a new address whom is still near my school"
Corrected
"I moved to a new address that is still near my school."
3. "(somebody's name) forsaked me, he didn't come this morning."
Corrected
"(somebody's name) didn't come this morning as he promised and I feel he has forsaken me."
4. "Some detailed informations about me, read this at first"
Corrected
"Read this to see my detailed information."
Good luck
2006-07-01 12:05:00 · answer #5 · answered by The Answer Man 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
i can try to lead you in the right direction...
1) use your time wisely. it is the beginning of the month and there still is a alot to do. this break is not long enough to relax, especially with bad habits.
2) even though i moved, i still live close by.(my school)
3)"someone" let you down by not showing up
4)read the important info about me 1st
2006-07-01 12:02:53 · answer #6 · answered by Ms. DeVine 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
take time, its the first day of July.
I am moving to a new address which is still near my school.
jack forsook me he did not come this morning.
Read these first as there are detailed information about me.
2006-07-01 12:00:53 · answer #7 · answered by Mary K 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I respect that you're trying, but your sentences do not make sense. Your sentences are very bad. You need to start over. Good luck.
2006-07-01 12:02:03 · answer #8 · answered by VanessaSFA 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋