I wrote it,do you like it,ok here it goes.
Everytime I try to say a word
I feel like I'm being unheard
And all that I feel is not what's real
But life can be hard in many ways
This is the time to show
That life isn't a game or slow
Living,and feeling like you care
Sharing and acting out of nowhere
Sometimes I feel like I am the only
One who knew what kept us
Together,truthful and through
Even though I act as if I do not
Know,on the inside I do show
That I really want to know
Who you are and what you see and do
This is the time to show
That life isn't a game or slow
Living,and feeling like you care
Sharing and acting out of nowhere
I can't forget the memories
It's all in my head
Hunting me and giving me worries
I just know what you said
Hmmmm yeah,ohhhh,yeah,yeaaaaaaah.
This is the time to show
That life isn't a game or slow
Living, and feeling like you care
Sharing and Acting out of nowhere
Repeat twice.
It's called Love and life.
2006-07-01 11:40:46 · 23 answers · asked by Sophia 4 in Entertainment & Music ➔ Music
sing it to me next time beautiful.
2006-07-01 11:46:50 · answer #1 · answered by INOTFRIEND 4 · 10⤊ 5⤋
It's not so bad, but it is really really long. And since most people have like ADD; its too long. You might think of making it shorter. And also what is that whole business with hmmmm yeah, ohhh. It sounds kind-of stupid to me. You might want to fix that. And its also a little cheesy too. How long exactly did it take for you to write it? Like a few minutes or a long time? Because it shows effort but doesn't look like you proofread it or anything or had someone else proofread it.
2006-07-01 18:49:35 · answer #2 · answered by danceprincess5533 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I love it! Xpecially the title that's really good. But I would like to hear the tune you should be like a person who creates lyrics for people. Thats really good. Do you sing? But in the chorus I'd say change the second line to that life isn't timed or slow.
2006-07-01 18:48:51 · answer #3 · answered by hannahbyun10 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I like it, but I agree with a lot of the other people, I need to hear the tune. But you are good at writing songs. Keep up the good work!
2006-07-01 18:45:46 · answer #4 · answered by jawmom_03 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
You have deep feelings and it shows in this song that
you wrote. It's too bad you couldn't show us the musical
notes so we could know what it sounds like. Maybe we
will hear it one of these days. Best of luck with Love and
Life!
2006-07-01 18:49:29 · answer #5 · answered by Bethany 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
It sort of goes up and down, from begining to end, but it's a good one. It shows that you do, have a talent for writing.
2006-07-01 18:45:27 · answer #6 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
I need to hear the tune. The lyric isn't all that bad
2006-07-01 18:43:47 · answer #7 · answered by ladylike 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Well, i like it. Can you post it on MySpace Bulletin?
Breakdown:
Rhyming: 4/5
Feeling: 5/5
Singing Performance: 4.5/5
Overall: 4.5/5
2006-07-01 18:48:14 · answer #8 · answered by Malcolm uses Xbox 360 Avatar 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
The lyrics are gorgeous. Simply gorgeous.
2006-07-01 18:44:09 · answer #9 · answered by littlemissjewel101 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I think this song is pretty cool. I write music myself so do you want to chat sometime.
2006-07-01 18:44:09 · answer #10 · answered by The Notorious 1! 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I think it is pretty good. Add more words to the verses.
2006-07-01 18:45:42 · answer #11 · answered by -107 Steps- 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋