Here are two :
1. "... like the title showed, It's his stage on which he shows himself." (showed or shown here ? )
2. "Life is brief, everybody among us are belong to death ! "
Some changes to improve the language quality ?
2006-07-01 11:27:42 · 6 answers · asked by PHEFRADE 2 in Education & Reference ➔ Primary & Secondary Education
1. "...like the title states, It's his stage on which he acts."
2. "Life is brief; every one of us ultimately has a date with death."
That's probably what I would say, but it's difficult to tell for certain, since I have no idea of the context...
2006-07-01 11:31:59 · answer #1 · answered by amberaewmu 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
When I correct my students' writing, I try not to impose my style on the student. Therefore, I try to change as little as possible, though I know there are better ways to say the same things.
1. " . . . as the title states, it is his stage on which he shows himself."
2. "Life is brief; everyone among us belongs to death!"
2006-07-01 11:47:47 · answer #2 · answered by tianjingabi 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
1. "... like the title suggests, It's his stage on which he shows himself."
2. "Life is brief, everyone amongst us belongs to death! "
2006-07-01 11:35:33 · answer #3 · answered by Sam 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
"like the title states, he has shown himself on his stage"
"life is brief, death becomes us all"
knowing the piece you are referring to would help to clarify the statements
2006-07-01 11:34:08 · answer #4 · answered by Tessie 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
This is better i think.
"...just like the title, the stage is where he showed himeslf (replace showed himself with "performed" if it feels better)
"Life is brief, everyone succumbs to death.
Good luck
2006-07-01 11:37:45 · answer #5 · answered by Sherlock 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
i cant help you on that do ur own stuff ok bu bye
2006-07-01 11:30:55 · answer #6 · answered by lilhdsgurl 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋