a Soldiers Soul by:
A Soldier is not just a Woman or Man.
He is a Son, she is a daughter.
He is a boyfriend She is a girlfriend
He is a husband, She is a wife.
He is a brother,She is a sister.
He is a friend, She is a friend to someone.
aDont listen t those who say those Soldiers are thinking about this and that.
Know that Soldier is thinking and hoping they get back to "you"
Angel wings flake over the blood of the lost, and Gods passion is with all those Men and Women.
those at home, God knows your pain.
Know tragedy is a curse as well as a blessing it kills us but makes us stronger.
It is said Time is done. Now only remains the test of love.
Keep all your trust and Love in God and even if your loved one does not make it. God promises you stay true to him you will see them again. for the love of God is foreverand his love goes with those who believe in him.
Remember war tears apart butShows us the valueof each other and shows us how much we care for one another.
2006-06-30 08:49:20 · 12 answers · asked by Remedy 1 in Society & Culture ➔ Religion & Spirituality
War is always wrong. Jesus told us to love our eneimes. There was no except for in his directive.
2006-06-30 08:56:43 · answer #1 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
I like the first part, up through 'God knows your pain.' Then in the next line, I would cut out the word 'Know.' It sounds stronger if you just state it outright. Likewise, I would cut the word 'Remember' from the last sentence. Also, the last five lines are written more like prose than poetry. You lose both the power and the simplicity that your poem started off with.
All in all, it's a good thought and you're on the right track, but the second half in particular still needs improvement. Good luck!
2006-06-30 09:09:37 · answer #2 · answered by Caritas 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
It's ok...
I like the end... but.. about the part that says.. don't listen to those who say those soldiers are thinking about this and that...??
My husband serves in the armed forces and he is proud to be an american serving in another country.. Same with my grandfather who served and his grandfather who served and my cousin who just got back after going 3 times and my brother in law who is in Iraq now...
What's the point in joining the military if it's not to fight for your country and what you believe in?
Just for the steady paycheck and the benefits... ?
People should think of the extreme before they sign up...
It IS the military you know...
BTW.. I couldn't mail you back so here is your response...
From: Clint
Subject: yo
Message: Sounds like hes fighting for greed if its for the stedy check why else would he join the army thats what your anwser is tellin me its greed.
What are you talking about? My hubby is not in the Army number one.. number two.. I was insinuating that whoever the person is that you are talking about... if they didn't expect to fight.. then why did they join the military?
Learn to read
p.s. My hubby is in the navy.. our Grandparents were in the Army and my brother in law is a Marine in Iraq... and my cousin is in the Army and just got back from Iraq.
2006-06-30 08:57:32 · answer #3 · answered by ? 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Its a bit long and despressing, but with a happy ending. I'd say on a scale from 1 to 10 - its a 7!
2006-06-30 08:54:57 · answer #4 · answered by Trish 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
From one poet to another-
Very well-done and thought out. It has a nice flow to it and your meaning and purpose comes across without resulting to tactics of less-skilled writers.
From one human to another-
I thought it was beautiful and you deserve a lot of credit for writing it.
2006-06-30 08:56:54 · answer #5 · answered by K M 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Excellent, very well written, very well thought out, a breath of fresh air. Keep up the good work!!!!
2006-06-30 09:16:29 · answer #6 · answered by razor 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Beautiful poem with a lot of heart and soul. I liked it a lot!
2006-06-30 08:54:19 · answer #7 · answered by toughguy2 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Sad, moving - well thought out -- i'd space the He is a... She is a... throughout the text though.
2006-06-30 08:53:59 · answer #8 · answered by martyn b 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
It's touching. Coming from someone who has a brother shipping out to Iraq in September, it's appreciated.
2006-06-30 08:56:19 · answer #9 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
Very deep. I like it
2006-06-30 08:53:08 · answer #10 · answered by wannabebeachbum 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋