I've written a poem. Tell me what you think...?

Question

I was there in the room
The darkness consuming me like a burning flame.
The intense silence so penetrating,
Driving me closer to madness.

I was caged like an animal,
And like an animal I roared in protest;
Eventually those roars died down to a whimper.
Finally they ceased.

I longed for someone to open the door,
To let the ray of light in;
To save me;
To release me.
No one came.

I was there in the room.
Alone. Alone. Alone.

Just writing this poem took me to many places I didn't want to go but I guess I had to go there. Thanks a lot for your positive remarks it has really made my day!

Answer 1

it is actually pretty good. i like it. don't give up you should keep writing poems, i read it and i can almost feel what you felt when you wrote the poem. Good job.

i write lyrics and i wish i could make them somehow a lil darker then they come out to be and you showed me that it is possible that i just need to work on it more, your poem is great.

Answer 2

I like it. It comes from down deep in the heart. It feels like that you have a lot of feeling that you are trying to let out and no one is listening to you. You should submit it to a poetry contest and see what happens..... Good Luck

Answer 3

I think it's good. That's the same kind of poems I used to write when I was in highschool. Keep it up, don't stop writting like I did!

Answer 4

i like it! its very emo and dark...thats what makes good poetry. anyways just for a little advice. i would think twice before posting and original work on the internet for millions of people to see. you should get a copyright on it first. you should enter this in a poetry contest cause its really good.

Answer 5

Nice

Answer 6

I like it, but it is so dark. what got you to the point that you would write like that. the only reason that I ask is cuz when i am depressed I write poetry to express my feelings and my poems are usually dark.

Answer 7

Deep....beautiful

Answer 8

that was a very good poem. it is WAY better than anyone else i know or even myself could even dream of writing. : - )

Answer 9

I like it. I think it touches on emotions that affect us all at one time or another. Who hasn't felt alone...alone...alone.

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Answer 10

1 question, are there no light switches in the room?