I stay up all night listening to sad songs
What have I done to be so wrong
I feel as if there is an empty place inside me
I see my my reflection; Don't like what I see
I can't see the point of being me at all
When my confidence seems to be so small
I read as I write this
What have I missed?
My brain is dead
These words are screaming out of my head
My diary holds my truest secrets of life
but now it only leads me to strife
I am not suicidal
Just depressed
All I deserve is eternal rest
I don't really know why I wrote this, but tell me if you like it. And I am not depressed or suicidal - it just sounded good.
2006-06-23 19:39:56 · 23 answers · asked by Anonymous in Education & Reference ➔ Words & Wordplay
I am not suicidal - I just wrote it out and thought it was good - I am perfectly happy being me - and no comments about Jesus - I am Jewish for hevens sake!
2006-06-23 19:50:05 · update #1
Get a life Duane
2006-07-02 20:49:03 · update #2
Yes I am a poet - My favorite peom was a school project to write a poem about the book Freak the Mighty.
2006-07-04 05:20:16 · update #3
I stay up all night listening to great songs
How I wish I would live for long
I feel as if there is no place empty inside me
I see my my reflection; Don't you like what you see?
I can't see the point of just being me at all
When I could be so big, sometimes yet so small
I read as I write this
What have I missed?
My brain is in a trance
Words are twisting like a dance.
My diary holds my truest secrets of my times.
The conquests of my love to my preschool rhymes.
I am never suicidal nor depressed
I shall always struggle in life for the best.
You have talent lady, you need to be positive thats all,People who are poetic tend to generally get depressed cause they feel true love. and love is full of imagination mixed with insecurity and emotion, love You.
2006-07-05 23:18:44 · answer #1 · answered by Anonymous · 2⤊ 0⤋
It a good start for a poem the only problem is some things don't connect i would chang the order of the first two lines and the line 3 and 4 make line3 line 4
What have I done to be so wrong
I stay up all night listening to sad songs
I see 'a' reflection; Don't like what I see
I feel as if there's an 'emptiness' inside me
try this' but all in all i love the concept leave your reader with some thoughts in their heads!
keep up the good work ; and by all means keep writing.
2006-06-24 02:54:53 · answer #2 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
_smile_put a smile on your face act like you are so happy soon you will be so happy.
Remember there is one person you have to love because thatperson it always with you and that person is you .
you can never get away from yourself to matter how bad you want to a times.
I know I love myself , that's the secret of being Happy. don't forget that. Good Luck _smile_
2006-06-24 02:50:37 · answer #3 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
You know, your poem is really good. It sometimes happens to me too & at that time , poems come to my head as well. It's just a passing mood. And I think it'll die down soon. I praise you for not letting your feelings keep u down and I really like the way u think.
2006-06-24 04:16:45 · answer #4 · answered by Mimi 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
It's great.
Girlie, you better slap a copyright on that fast- next thing you know It'll be a new Kelly Clarkson song!
2006-06-24 02:44:02 · answer #5 · answered by MissManners 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Pretty good. It describes the way alot of people feel from time to time when they reach their lowest point. I agree with another user that said to make it longer. Its good.
2006-07-06 08:32:50 · answer #6 · answered by WhatheHell 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
plant a tree and you will feel better
sounds as if you need more fresh air
can find a question in your letter
trying hard for a praise that is fair
2006-06-24 02:51:32 · answer #7 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
Hey.It's a great poem.You should publish it or rather create a tune and make it into a song.You will be a hit.
Good luck.
2006-06-24 02:41:54 · answer #8 · answered by Eternity 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
well, it came from somewhere. and even if you're not depressed or suicidal, it's good that you wrote it down, put it to words. i think it's really great, you should have it published
2006-07-04 14:38:26 · answer #9 · answered by music_is_my_favorite_drug 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
sounds good but my question is do you know Jesus Christ? Find him and know him and you will begin to like you better with his help
2006-06-24 02:44:56 · answer #10 · answered by Guess Who 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋