Please dont mind about this poem tell me how it is just a view of imagination?

Question

America the bricks of your buildings are made of human bones,and the cement
is mixed with the blood of the innocent people whom you killed, you are the whore of the world
wicked people from all region have sex with you and enjoy your immorality,
Thats why (Americans In Danger Situation )(AIDS)
America a place where virgins strip off shamelessly and ***** their brother to entertain the world
and hypocrites act to be the followers of christ,And fool people in name of religion.
where married womans desperate to have sex with young blood
and unsuccessful womens give advice to teenage girls on how to get pregnant,
where homosexuality is considered as gods gift and people only live for
sexual pleasure

America a place where 90% people live on cocaine and blame Afghanistan as outrated place.
Where satan worship is considered as fashion and teenage girls compete as who gets fu.cked first
with the handsome.
the country which has the maximum song of praising satan.
America the place where people are judged on their colour and beautiful
people are considered lucky..
Is this what Americans say is first world country....."I LOVE AMERICA" lol

Sorry if theres any grammatical error

I've never been to USA ..I had this vision when i planned to go.

Answer 1

I stand by what I said when you first posted this 'poem' in another category so I will reprint my reply from before;

'It would be perfect if you were trying to infect the recruits of your terrorist group with self-righteous condemnation, prosecutional bloodlust and superiority justification. Look hard enough at anything and you will be able to find the worst. Anyone can do that.

I think it takes real courage and guts in this day and age to stand up and say, "There is bad, but there is also good, let's start spreading that around for a change."

As for the poem it is supposed to be, I don't think so. You are trying to inflame so as to get attention. Your 'poem' does not have the mark of an artist. Real poems invoke thought, not make the reader want to go out and lynch someone.'

I would also like to add that this is a first that I have heard about you not having been to the US before. Perhaps you should just stop obeying other people when they tell you to start foaming at the mouth and begin to realise your own opinions.

May God and His Word dictate your actions.

Answer 2

I liked it somewhat around the edges. I felt the poems tone and that's good to get out. There wasn't enough spacing and I think that helped the tensity and exaggeration of it all. The style of your text is a bit choppy but that does help to show how you talk as a person.

Over all I think you did a really good job with this one. Keep up the good work. The imagery is impeccable but it could use a little more shock. The mixed emotions dilutes the shock value but it is very good poem.

Answer 3

I think your imagination is limited to cliches
in this piece....
I advise becoming more original.
If you are serious about writing, you have to write from your own experiences.
You have to form your own opinions.
This piece sounds angry, but it also sounds like your life experiences are limited and your understanding of America and aspects of American life are compromised by other people's views.
Suggestions:
Examine your own feelings more closely when hearing news or reading news articles.
Read a piece that draws out strong feelings in you more than once to make sure your read everything correctly and didn't misinterpret.
Read more!
See more!
Think things through more.
Get tough with yourself. If you find yourself agreeing with everything you read, ask yourself why?. . . do I really feel the same way?. . . how do I differ?

I think it was very guttsy of you to put this up and ask opinions! Shows you have courage-work with that.

Namaste!

Lil

Answer 4

There is a boat (a plane) leaving every day for wherever you would like to live besides the USA.
Oh that's right your too busy enjoying all the benefits of the country while spewing your hate.
You need to leave or shut up If you stay and enjoy the benefits you are a hypocrite!

Answer 5

well the peom is not doing bad,infact u are bringing out the reality of what takes place in america, i have liked it and if u have enough evidence that all this is true go ahead and publish it
for the world and especally us africans to know whats taking place in these first world countries

Answer 6

And America, you are the place that allows anyone to express their feelings openly, honestly, and without fear.

I really DO love America.

Answer 7

That's the problem....you write about a country you have never been to. You are a hypocrite.

Answer 8

boy, you should take a bath first before asking questions here.
and use some deodorant too before you go thru the immigration.

aahaaahaaaa..... chuuuuuuuu!

Answer 9

Hey... you were inspired from Ezeikel 23, right? Don't deny it ;) LOL...
and that's why u put your poem in religion n spirituality :)))

Answer 10

If you do it more in a positive way everybody will like it. you are insulting americans. i am not from there but i am sorry for u