i've been sitting on the beach watching waves crash apon the shore i gotta feeling that i never felt b4 to see your face your warm and brave the voice i love you hear i hear yours same time next yeah
this poem is detacated to my grandmom she was the only on who really took care and under stood me she has been dead now for 8 years god i miss her sooo much
R.I.P Patrisha Breccia
July 30, 1998
2006-06-13 05:12:29 · 11 answers · asked by Anonymous in Arts & Humanities ➔ Performing Arts
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2006-06-13 05:17:04 · answer #1 · answered by kep1 3 · 0⤊ 1⤋
I think the poem you wrote really looks and sounds interesting and I am proud of you for writing this poem about your Grandmom, and she has been dead for 8 years now, and lost my grandmom too and dearly missed her more than anything else because she was a good Grandmother to me. She used to bake all kinds of pies from A-Z. God bless you. Maybe you will see your Grandmom in Heaven one day when God says you are ready to go home with him.
2006-06-13 05:22:03 · answer #2 · answered by roverspotblue 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I appreciate that you are expressing your grief through verse, but the poem needs to be reworked. There are some typos throughout and the end of the poem runs together nonsensically.
2006-06-13 08:18:18 · answer #3 · answered by Carole 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Very good! You wanted to convey sadness ... Perfect spelling is way over rated....this way it actually looks unique. Sorry about your grandma...I feel the same way about my brother...it' s been 10 years. Keep on writing!!!
2006-06-13 12:07:31 · answer #4 · answered by justmemimi 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
It's a really nice poem... it touched my heart...
2006-06-13 08:22:48 · answer #5 · answered by Anna K 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
nice but run spellcheck next time.
2006-06-13 05:47:24 · answer #6 · answered by myanjill 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Its nice.
2006-06-13 05:28:45 · answer #7 · answered by Chloe 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Thats so nice!I like it=)
2006-06-19 08:20:59 · answer #8 · answered by Deedee ♥ 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
really nice..it touched my heart **hugs**
2006-06-13 07:09:58 · answer #9 · answered by eatdungumbridge 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
its beautiful
2006-06-20 04:51:05 · answer #10 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
i think its beautiful.
2006-06-13 05:22:40 · answer #11 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋