Dancing around,
What was not man made,
Shedding tears of hope,
For what I want to keep,
Souls dance on treetops,
Vibrating the air as I get closer.
Squeals of sacred harmony,
Lighten my heart and open my eyes a bit further.
Watching what can never be stolen from me,
As I sit on a branch,
Fizzing color whispering,
Into my ear.
2007-12-31 17:51:26 · 10 answers · asked by Anonymous in Arts & Humanities ➔ Poetry
Oh Po! This one's a killer. I love it!
2007-12-31 18:05:18 · answer #1 · answered by Anonymous · 2⤊ 0⤋
very nice, but sacred harmony....?
2007-12-31 17:57:18 · answer #2 · answered by eskay11 1 · 0⤊ 1⤋
uhhhhhhh...........................................
?????? ok.........some how this does not make sence....sorry girl.
2007-12-31 17:56:23 · answer #3 · answered by Love Chick ;) 2 · 0⤊ 1⤋
this poem is beautiful! i luv writing poems myself,but this is amazing. i luv the rithmatic feeling to it and how you can kind of picture it. the name makes sense, also!
2007-12-31 17:56:12 · answer #4 · answered by clouds move like a wraith 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I love it. Imagery was wonderful. I loved it and it made me smile. I love poetry that makes you think and smile.
2007-12-31 17:56:11 · answer #5 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 0⤋
Its great, flows good, but the word fizzing kinda throws it off a little.
2007-12-31 17:55:39 · answer #6 · answered by Ziegh 1 · 1⤊ 0⤋
as a felow poet it was ok some beat could be added but nice one here is my e-mail i can give u more tips Tan9510@yahoo.com
2007-12-31 17:55:18 · answer #7 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
good poem:)
2007-12-31 17:54:43 · answer #8 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
I love it when poetry engages the senses. "Fizzing color" adds sound and movement to sight--a wonderful poetic device.
2008-01-01 02:56:18 · answer #9 · answered by Elaine P...is for Poetry 7 · 1⤊ 0⤋
I liked it quite well ; thank you ! :0)
2007-12-31 19:33:39 · answer #10 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋