All these thoughts jumbled up in my head ~And they're all stuck there like glue ~There are a lot of things I could be thinkin' about ~But what I'm thinkin' 'bout is you
Is it love or just an obcession? ~ Do you love me back? Have I made a good impression?~Should I try to hide~The feelings that I feel inside?
(Chorus)
'Cause somedays I hate you, somedays I doubt you Somedays I love you and I can't live without you
Other days you're the furthest thing from my mind
And still other days the thought of you keeps me alive
Sometimes I wonder what life would be~If the thought of you weren't there to comfort me~Sometimes it seems that all I wanna do~Is think about you
All these words caught in my throat, waiting to be set free~All I wanna talk about, talk about is you and me~Today it's the good, tomorrow its the bad~Maybe the relationship that we coulda had~One day I'll say that we're not meant to be~The next day I'll say I think you might like me (theres more but this is all i can fit
2007-12-30 14:33:10 · 12 answers · asked by I <3 Relient K 3 in Entertainment & Music ➔ Polls & Surveys
Oh, yeah. I see that "thought of you weren't" should be "thought of you wasn't." Small grammatical error!
2007-12-30 14:50:41 · update #1
omg, thats really good!!!!! id totally listen to it
2007-12-30 14:37:00 · answer #1 · answered by girlslikeboys 3 · 1⤊ 0⤋
No, that isn't what Simone or Simon could say.... even nonetheless-her is my critic marks: exciting music lyrics, a sprint degrading yet with that aside here is going. a million. Mommy? i wish thats no longer the identify. 2. Take out the be conscious "lived" in....a guy made existence lived in familiar denial. Make it a guy made existence in familiar denial, so it doesnt substitute right into a tongue tornado. 3. additionally the be conscious "merely", merely doesnt greater healthy there easily. MAke it...i desire to look as though her on the canopy of charm different than that...it is suitable. DO you have the music too? stable success
2016-10-02 22:32:48 · answer #2 · answered by starkes 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Very nice lyrics! Communicates well, good rhyme scheme... With the right tune, this could be a hit.
Just one teeny thing...."If the thought of you WEREN'T there...." really isn't clear -- doesn't quite make sense.
(Looking forward to seeing you accept your Grammy soon).
2007-12-30 14:43:38 · answer #3 · answered by Lucky Luka 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
i like them
but i mean i think it all boils down to the beat and music in the end not so as long as the lyrics are okay and the music is off the shizzle than your good
2007-12-30 14:36:39 · answer #4 · answered by tiffanys4eva 2 · 1⤊ 0⤋
wow i realy like that so much i mean there is so much depth in it as others have said before it all boils down to the music and the beat but just so you know you have the lyrics down perfict i love it keep it up!!!!!!
2007-12-30 14:42:37 · answer #5 · answered by Garrett B 2 · 1⤊ 0⤋
it feels like its been done before....i mean so many people have written songs about love and obsession and all that
try changing it to something a little bit less used all the time
2007-12-30 14:38:50 · answer #6 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 1⤋
Very nice. There is some talent in there!
2007-12-31 09:26:59 · answer #7 · answered by Anne Arkey 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
i mean, its like gumbo. You find anything you can and put it in the pot. But thats just my point of view because I'm in the show business and I know whats right and what's not.
2007-12-30 14:40:39 · answer #8 · answered by ? 3 · 0⤊ 2⤋
It has some sketchy parts, but it's okay.
2007-12-30 14:36:01 · answer #9 · answered by pulse. 6 · 0⤊ 1⤋
It's good. I read it all.
2007-12-30 14:42:09 · answer #10 · answered by Max 7 · 1⤊ 0⤋