Lost at Home
when I lost my last truth you found me.
enwrapped me while i sobbed.
You didn't know why.
You still don't.
to kind to ask.
Selfless .
As mother to child. A true man.
You, a miracle.
your comfort
the greatest gift I have ever known.
your arms around me
My only home.
MJ
2007-12-30 05:53:04 · 6 answers · asked by M H 1 in Arts & Humanities ➔ Poetry
Amazing. Your use of words allowed me to feel how much pain you suffered and then how much love you gained.
2007-12-30 06:04:08 · answer #1 · answered by die for poetry 2 · 1⤊ 1⤋
Beautiful. it makes me feel good for you. Sounds like you have a keeper. I'm thinking the title is a tad inappropriate though. It should be "Right At Home". Seems to be like you aren't lost with those arms around you.
2007-12-30 15:40:59 · answer #2 · answered by Pink Panther 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Thank you.
Simple, Subtle, to the point, and you make yours susinctly.
Steven Wolf
ADDED THOUGHT: I am surprised at 2 Thumbs down, when I complimented you, and Thumbed UP the first two???? I however will survive it, and have for many long years..Cheers on your work.
2007-12-30 14:04:42 · answer #3 · answered by DIY Doc 7 · 0⤊ 3⤋
OOhhh, I really like that. And I usually don't answer questions like that on here because usually the poetry's bad, so I mean it. :)
One tiny little grammar mistake though... the line that says "to kind to ask", the first "to" should be "too." Aside from that, wonderful.
2007-12-30 14:03:46 · answer #4 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 2⤋
I hate these types of poems. If, when you read this, you over punctuate the emphasis on verbs at random and sound like you are desperate for air, then this is the worst type of poem on earth.
2007-12-30 14:12:05 · answer #5 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 3⤋
it is great
2007-12-30 13:58:43 · answer #6 · answered by ben s 1 · 2⤊ 1⤋