what do you think of this pome???

Question

Some where just left of goggle
there is a place called yahoo answers
what is yahoo answers you ask?
yahoo answers is just a place
maybe it is a lot like your world or not
but if you look close you will find some one like you
some one trying to find there way
some one trying to find there place
some one that needs help
some one trying to find them self

my bad spelt it wrong!

Answer 1

nice poem

Answer 2

1. Pome... what's a pome? Short for pomegranate?
2. Do you mean Goggle or Google?
3. Back to second grade. Okay, class! Let's learn how to make a sentence! Now, class, who knows what the first thing you have to have at the start? That's right, a capital letter!
4. There/Their/They're - three different worrds. Not to be confused.
5. Who teaches you descriptive writing? "there is a place called yahoo answers. (more capitalization needed here.) what is yahoo answers you ask? yahoo answers is just a place." You didn't even answer your own question. If you said to a friend, "There is a place called Yahoo! Answers," and the person replied, interested, "What is Yahoo! Answers?", you can't just say "Yahoo! Answers is just a place". "Duh" much? We already know from your... um... "clever" second line that Yahoo! Answers is a place, thank you very much!
6. On that topic, do you notice something a little strange about your "pome"? Oh, that's right. You never actually say what Yahoo! Answers is.
7. FYI, not everyone using Yahoo! Answers is trying to find their place in the world, and trying to find themselves. I mean, YOU might think that people having trouble with Adobe Photoshop are on a soul-searching quest, but...
8. Pardon my bluntness, but it is just a boring poem. No amount of altering will change that fact.

Answer 3

No worries about GOGGLE, or POME, but SPELT is 3 strikes, LOL,,, No offense.

Whether or not you intended it, the last four lines impact the entire context of the piece, and so much suggest the WHY, we are "here"

Kudos.

Steven Wolf