What do you think of my poem, is this one any good?

Question

And the city time's opposite noon the clock lands
Sun, reflecting of the moon in my hands
It's brightness did lighten it there for man
And the amazing rays earth do bring upon it

And the galls over rivers soaring above
Flying high by day: for then pouring love
And they sing in anticipation of men coming together
They sing loud of the nations in the coldest weather

And there safety can be found in its warmth
Their beautiful sounds thing that deserve of a man
the attention of a mob that lasted long
Now, that's music's job, which serves its ejaculating song

THE music, The greatest of our songs, happily humming along
We sing quietly along! Steaming breaths lasting long
Leaving pain just wholly gone as we continue to smile on
Those that are present should sing with the souls growing song

Answer 1

I'm OK with it, other than to suggest some finessing. I found the most impact in the final 4 lines.

Steven Wolf

I happen to prefer free form, and certainly it should make sense, but as I've said before Mine is not the place of a seated Judge.

Answer 2

To say the truth, the poem is perplexing...

but you have a style, a form of expression, which a poet
must have to frame his indivuduality.

I would like to say that when you write, it must be in a way
that every one can easily understand and appreciate...

wish you all the best...I am sure that you will improve a lot
with writing and there is a poet in you for our tomorrows...
hope to see you soon again with another piece......

Answer 3

You bring out your soul to this song. I would be your number one fan. Are you going to be a music artist when you grow up? Well, if you are, this is the best made-up song I've ever heard!

Answer 4

Not a fan of this poem, sorry. It made me think to much and didn't understand some of it. Always waiting for next poem.

Good Luck &
Blessed Be

Answer 5

Awesome!!!!
Two thumbs up...
Five stars....
Good job, good job......