This is one of my favorites from 2007.
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Softness
Whispered words melt,
passing by,
the thoughts
inside tumble
as you smile
Strands of hair part
as an ear strains
to listen
Softly passing by,
they fall to your toes,
these scattered, whispered words.
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2007-12-28 10:26:38 · 9 answers · asked by Anonymous in Arts & Humanities ➔ Poetry
Or this?
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Rain drops, a voice
Blue clouds, a song
Torrent, a chorus
Thunder, the drums
Matinee Showcase
By the window, it’s warm
Play me another, Afternoon Storm
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2007-12-28 11:06:40 · update #1
Well, I love the personification of the whispered words; to me, words are the most powerful items on Earth. Anyone who believes that a picture is worth a thousand words, certainly isn't a poet!!
2007-12-28 11:07:06 · answer #1 · answered by Elaine P...is for Poetry 7 · 2⤊ 0⤋
While there are poems, there will be ctitics...that is what it takes...take his criticisms as a way to improve your writing , as a challenge, and not as a way to dampen your spirits...every invidual rising poets has his own style, manner, tone ,and emphasis in composing one...maybe just take them more into consideration,,,but I see a good poet running in your blood expressed freely by your heart...keep on, the more you write peoms, the more you get the knack of it...these two poems are really great and in my own understanding and interpretation........good luck!!!
2007-12-28 19:22:46 · answer #2 · answered by E@rthGoddess 6 · 1⤊ 0⤋
It's a sweet poem TDE but it's not going to launch your career. If this is the Nathan I've seen do crits on this section before, he usually does reasonable crits. Having said that, if you aren't happy with his crit, his is only one opinion. If you enjoy writing, and posting, keep writing and posting.
2007-12-28 18:45:20 · answer #3 · answered by margot 5 · 1⤊ 1⤋
LIKE IT.
In fact so well that I invite you to join us.
Try this one. Not only will you make friend with us all but you will get great ideas too.
http://www.thepoetrymansion.com/
If you come say hi to me.
Zaida --- Moderator
2007-12-28 23:00:01 · answer #4 · answered by moviereeler 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Nathan D"Critical is a floppy,flabby,lippypoem-pooper. You don't have to justify yourself to anyone who is a chad.
Right then, lets move on..This is nice, a wee bit thin........
2007-12-28 19:09:21 · answer #5 · answered by Anonymous · 2⤊ 0⤋
One of my daddy's favorite sayings was "opinions are like a@@holes, everybody has one!" I agree with the poster that it was jealousy.
2007-12-28 19:09:11 · answer #6 · answered by poe 5 · 1⤊ 0⤋
But we don't care what he thinks, I am perceptive as I blocked him a while back because he is just ignoRANT one of them who are just jealous more like.
2007-12-28 18:56:39 · answer #7 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 0⤋
I like it
2007-12-28 18:53:58 · answer #8 · answered by DP2009 2 · 1⤊ 0⤋
We don't give a damn at what he thinks of yer poems!
2007-12-28 19:00:41 · answer #9 · answered by Dark Dickinsonian 4 · 1⤊ 0⤋