When times like this come to me
Like a lonely heart dies to breathe
I say a prayer even if it makes me bleed
Tears of angel- calling me home
Forget yesterday and what you hold
Against your heart, in your soul
The chains break- waiting for the world to catch me
As I fall
And I’m so scared of living
Cause’ then I’ll be dying
And I can’t see above the clouds
And I’m talking to the winter’s air
Again
Making sense of pages of writing
And thoughts the linger in my heart
Today is the day I rise or fall
We’ll find ourselves on the subway train
Writing books about our lives
Wishing it was the older times
Today
When I saw past the haze and all the depressing days
That drag on like April rains
Cause get living or I’ll be dying
Like a lake I’m no river
Rushing past the rocks- and eroding them away
I’m just like the ocean deep and sometimes dark
You’re weightless when inside
My broken heart
And I’m so scared of living
Cause’ then I’ll be dying
And I can’t see above the clouds
And I’m talking to the winter’s air
Again
Making sense of pages of writing
And thoughts the linger in my heart
Today is the day I rise or fall
We’ll find ourselves on the subway train
Writing books about our lives
Wishing it was the older times
Today
Today we’ll say goodbye or hello
We’ll find the difference better rain and snow
Tonight will be the end or start
I’ll find the perfect line
And I won’t see the useless rhymes
About the good life, about the sad songs
Because there all wrong
2007-12-28 08:22:01 · 4 answers · asked by hawthorne_heights_421 2 in Entertainment & Music ➔ Music ➔ Lyrics
i'm 14 also
2007-12-28 08:32:00 · update #1
I sense your need to express yourself, but in this piece there isn't a clear point or artistic effect being made. Too many reaches for cliches are dragging this piece down.
2007-12-28 08:28:45 · answer #1 · answered by Your Uncle Dodge! 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Wow, this is rlly good!!
I write songs of my own,too. It's really just about expressing yourself and how you feel. . .and it seems you have expressed yourself very well through this.
Continue writing=]]
<3, Marie
2007-12-28 17:11:17 · answer #2 · answered by ßίтє мє! 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
yeah they are lovely but don't reck them by turing it into a rap song.
2007-12-28 16:29:41 · answer #3 · answered by ? 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
wow,not bad at all,keep it up!
2007-12-28 16:29:30 · answer #4 · answered by Avrilfan 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋