Is this response better?

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Does it make more sense? Do you like it more?

The previous acquaintance I made at school was a rock. I was shy, and didn’t know what to make of people. I’d tap the rock until the bell rang. Our interactions were simple, without guesswork. When someone on the bus started talking to me, I wouldn’t know what to do. He asked questions, told jokes and seemed mildly enthusiastic. I remained skeptical. He asked if I thought he was making fun of me. I didn’t know what to say. “I don’t do that kind of stuff,” he told me. It was simple and clear, despite all my guesswork.

(I'm talking about compared to the above paragraph)

Answer 1

Your first question called your work a poem. If it is then it's more like descriptive prose. I would put it as:-

The last acquaintance I made at school was a rock. I was shy, and didn’t know how to deal with people. I’d tap the rock until the bell rang. Our interactions were simple and clear. When someone on the bus started talking to me and I didn't know what to do he would ask questions, tell jokes and seem mildly enthusiastic. I remained skeptical. He asked me once if I thought he was making fun of me. I didn’t know how to answer. “I don’t do that kind of stuff,” he reassured me. It was simple and clear, despite all my guesswork.