I have it all figured out… all paths leading to the unknown are explained through a pinch of kindness and a dash of compassion, like a soup of understanding that I would drink on the coldest day. words that take time to write, but no time at all to adapt into your heart as truth. thus leading me to question if we are all born good and led to the dark side with our sorrow? I don’t know, I haven’t figured it all out yet.
2007-12-28 04:01:39 · 6 answers · asked by kub2 4 in Arts & Humanities ➔ Poetry
FAIT... that's the humility or catch 22 of it... but after reading it again, it does need a good measure of clean up.
2007-12-28 04:13:34 · update #1
thx Rainbow... hammer on nail
2007-12-28 06:12:22 · update #2
That is no poem you wrote; it is simply a narrative of what's on your mind that needs to be edited and polished.
2007-12-28 04:22:15 · answer #1 · answered by Guitarpicker 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I like the soup analogy. Go further with it. Maybe the dark side comes from adding too much to the soup?
Everyone should realize you’re brainstorming at the moment, and not to be too analytical.
Good luck!
2007-12-28 12:44:24 · answer #2 · answered by Rainbow 6 · 1⤊ 0⤋
Deep. However.....you contradict yourself in the end and somehow...it throws it off a little. Omit the "I have it all figured out..." Perhaps replace it with "I think I have it all figured out..." Or I thought.... or you could just omit it.
2007-12-28 12:08:46 · answer #3 · answered by Cathy 4 · 1⤊ 0⤋
okay. try to write all the ideas and later you'll combine it together
2007-12-28 12:10:06 · answer #4 · answered by Kai 4 · 1⤊ 0⤋
it needs to b more organised.......but thoughts r good
2007-12-28 12:17:13 · answer #5 · answered by spy reynaulds 2 · 1⤊ 0⤋
dang, i like it a lot, dawg! :) no kiddin :)
2007-12-28 12:43:24 · answer #6 · answered by shanekeavy 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋