I Love You
Those three words,
Are so hard for me to say…
Maybe, just maybe,
I’ll get to use them some day…
http://www.poemhunter.com/poem/i-love-you-21/
I have posted four poems on this site and ttwo this si the third are on yahoo anwsers
the poems r under the name ali hasan my brother
2007-12-22 17:53:55 · 8 answers · asked by JaAfNy 1 in Arts & Humanities ➔ Poetry
http://www.poemhunter.com/poem/i-love-you-21/
the fourth poem is done by my brother on this site "my heart"
2007-12-22 17:56:01 · update #1
I like it. But I wouldn't say it's high quality - the words are too ordinary, and the I love you theme is conveyed in a too common way. The poem isn't short at all - I just think you could say a lot more in that length.
Try making it unique by developing your own style, too. Poems don't always have to rhyme. (I'm pretty sure you're aware of this.)
Also, poetry is always good when it has a bit of mystery :)
Good luck!
2007-12-22 22:51:57 · answer #1 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
Thats pretty good! I believe that the length of a poem isn't what matters, its the message that we get that matters.
2007-12-23 01:58:37 · answer #2 · answered by Tony 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
very sweet but you are notlyric enough...it reminds me the small teenage poems...when you write you should give to the poem a piece of your soul...make it yours...say how you feel, from a few lines...
2007-12-23 05:50:17 · answer #3 · answered by amazone 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Short but sweet. Have you ever tried haiku's. I think you'd do well to explore them.
2007-12-23 02:51:30 · answer #4 · answered by Windy 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I like it. A lot is conveyed in a few lines.
2007-12-23 01:59:14 · answer #5 · answered by Susan S 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Short and sweet!
2007-12-23 03:04:55 · answer #6 · answered by The Count of Montanelas 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
That is not really a poem.
2007-12-23 02:01:36 · answer #7 · answered by MadforMAC 7 · 0⤊ 1⤋
simple and sweet.
2007-12-23 02:55:40 · answer #8 · answered by Analyst 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋