poem.... its called "Tears"?

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poem.... its called "Tears"?

Moments pass when I feel scared, My eyes began to water and my heart begans to scare. My arms are open from side to side, my heart is now weak from all the pain inside.Tears roll down my cheeks, feeling the sadness inside of me. My only hope is the love from the puddle in the sea.

2007-12-20 07:45:15 · 3 answers · asked by princess 2 in Arts & Humanities ➔ Poetry

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wow pretty good !

2007-12-20 08:15:12 · answer #1 · answered by Sara S 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋

Where's the poem? Didn't find a poem, only a diary entry. Give it some form of meter, rhythm, flow. Make it sound like poetry. Poetry is about the sound as it is spoken, even more perhaps than the subject.
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2007-12-20 16:21:40 · answer #2 · answered by Dondi 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋

it is okay but add a bit more!

2007-12-20 17:01:24 · answer #3 · answered by Soccer Girl ♥ 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋