Do you like this poem?

Question

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Little Boy Child

Play with life,
My little boy child,
The road goes on,
For miles and miles,
Stop to chase snowflakes,
Leapfrog, catch rain,
Kiss the miller's daughter,
Search for treasure in the cane,

The more times you reach
Into pockets of time,
For a token, or ticket,
A piece of red twine,
Or pause to throw seed
From the hen keepers gate,
The less time you'll have
To fear, loathe and hate,

These moments spent well,
My little boy child,
Turn days into lifetimes,
Inches to miles,
Strength comes from vision,
Wisdom from smiles,
Let fools seek out fortune,
March rank and file,

For when you do reach
The toll master's gate,
No icon of gold
Scepter, or crown,
Will pay for the passage,
Like this love you have found…

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This is another really old one. I wrote this in the late 80s. I have been looking for it for days. I had posted it once, on the old profile. There's more that I can't find, like "Nothing is Sacred". I wrote it live and don't have a copy. Dang! That sucker was funny!

Answer 1

holy crap, this is the most original good poem i have read in months! very good job..... you have a good way with words! please keep writing :)

Answer 2

TD, you really are special.

I think this is one of your best, and that's saying a lot. The loss of childhood innocence is one of the saddest and most profound changes that occur within the human psyche. This poem touched me.

Geez, sorry if that sounded like a suck up answer. I'll be happy to offer some smartass insult to balance the equation.

But seriously, folks, you really should publish this stuff. I'd be happy to help with the pick-and-choose of what you would like to include in your book. What do I know but I think a publisher would be interested.

Answer 3

Like Loose Change, I feel really bad having to tell you this is really good. I read it before breakfast, and I thought I'd wait till after my tea to read it again and appreciate it again. It is very moving. Sometimes your poems are more distant, but this one is all feelings. You don't want to touch it for fear it will start crying.

Answer 4

I like this one because it's filled with metaphors and imagery, not to mention creative turns of phrases. "Pockets of time" is amazing, as is "the toll master's gate." This one needs to be published--somewhere, anywhere--in print.

Answer 5

As I was reading, I said to myself, this sounds like his older work - and then read that, in fact, was. It's still a very good poem with a great message.

Answer 6

The poet reminds of the passage of life.